DoomGaze

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being outcasted and alienated i think is what you trying to explain here... it always hard to make new friends, unless what you are reffering to is that your old friends are getting "tired of you" and your now officially expendable. I like this poem, let's you demonstrate that certain degree of anger that is there and not. Reminds me of what my friends do Those damn @$$h0L3$ Sometimes i feel like shooting them Thx for sharing

Remains Untouched ------------------------------------ Your blood has stained my wings, Turning them from black to crimson red. A feather falls lifelessly, Resting on the white marble floor. My wings shine, reflecting all light, Sweet, dark eyes staring in the clouds. The sun shines down on everything, But my soul, remains untouched. Tears of impurity drop from the heavens, And rain hard on my head. The blood drips from the feathers, Making them pure once more. With all that happening, I see your still standing right here. Smiles, uncommon to my face, appear, More light shines, but my soul, remains untouched.

again, very emotional and serious, i like your work. Thx for sharing

all good here... yup yup, uh huh..... ok ill shut up now

Tass, your title is true in a sense, I can see you put rdm things in, but all in all, it actually makes sense, and it is pretty good.. short and quite depressing i might add : keep writing!

I agree with Tass, well written indeed, i wanna see more of this work from you falcon.. it is really excellent.. on the otherhand, i agree with Tass being a love hater

Is This The End? --------------------------- My world has turned upside down, Taken a turn from better to worse. My spirit hits the ground, Driven into last position, from being first. You say you love me, I don't know what to believe in, Nobody ever leaves us be, Why is it so bad? Is it a sin? You start to cry, a tear gently falls, Your pain reaches mine, I cry also, but the pain still calls, Pulling me away, far from fine.

The person above me loves to poke his big pointy stick where it shouldnt be

Fields of Fame ------------------ Flowers blossom in an untamed land. They sit ever so still, Yet wild they stand, And every void they fill. I pass it everytime, And the wind echoes my name. Begging me, to commit a crime, To reach a certain degree of fame. But still I refuse, Despite the fortune they promise me, To go where they choose, They think I'm blind, that I can't see. Centuries pass, still it remains untouched, I still walk these fields at night. Thinking back on the times I missed so much, They still whisper to me, but I continue to fight.

lol @ archaneus, this is actually a neat subject to do it on, but i agree with Arc, it need a better flow to it..

to me, it seems a little short, but anyhow it is still good, maybe add another stanza? i dunno, thats my 2 cents worth

where are all these great poets coming from, ever since i moved in, more people with greater talent have stepped up to the plate.. jeez, i might as well retire early but then again, i like writing poetry. Welcome to the Pen

its good, but i dont think you were tired last night cause of lack of sleep but you were ... you know... preoccupied with me

Congrats Elvida.. knew you can make it!

The person right above me ain't too poisonous, but a good poet indeed

WoW im amazed.. beautifully written, certainly one of the best i've seen so far.

HaHa very funny Tass, but i'm not changing it. I'm keeping it as is. But thx for the suggestion anyway

The person above me is a penguin-holic... I don't know where this came from, it's just guess. (Damn Penguins!! )

The Contract of the Soul ----------------------------- I stand here wondering If I'll ever be okay. He came along with these papers, Just to sign, no cost to pay. He offered me everything, And I recieved nothing more, Than a cold, dead body Lying on the floor. I wish I could take back, That one little day, Where he came along in my life, And took something precious of mine away. I have no longer the will to survive, This life, just crying. Feels like so many daggers have stabbed me, Kill me now, I feel like dying. He will never come back, With more papers to sign, Because I remember those frightful words, "Your soul is now mine."

Blessed Touch ---------------------------- It seems that life's going too fast, To me, it looks like a blur. Trying to desperately hold on, To reach some place further. Up so many hills and down again, Twisting from side to side. I finally reached my destination, The ending to my ride. As I stand in the middle of the void, I hear but cannot see a person who sings. So I seek and follow this voice and, Stumble upon this heavenly being with wings. She graces me with her beauty, And her radiance shine ever so bright. Her green eyes pierce mine, And blocks out the darkness, giving me sight. She smiles and touches my forehead, Blesses me with a divine power. I stand ready to face the hardships ahead, And with this strength I shall not cower.

Nice short poem... gets the point across about your yearning to be free but someone/people want you to do what they want.. I've been in that situation before.. and it aint fun to be in. Great poem Thx for Sharing

The person above.. well is.... just simply CRAZY!! :woot: :woot:

Just to let you know.. i was trying something new.... i feel there is no harm in doing so.. trying a different, non powerful, yet tells a story poetry.... if you know what i mean

The Wave --------------------- The tide surges in, A faint silence runs about. The ocean's patience is wearing thin. She is very angry, I have no doubt. In the distance, a mountain is created. A great, towering blue wall. It screams towards land, with great hatred, Ready to leap, and take a fall. It keeps going, carried by it's own weight, Slowly descends, and purposely crashes Leaving a tremendous blow and nothing to debate. This is where both water and earth clashes. It is best if no one is to interfere, Just let nature take it's course. In your heart, it shall show you the true meaning of fear, Because it shows no mercy, and gives out no remorse.