Annael Posted July 19, 2003 Report Share Posted July 19, 2003 Dévotion Les mains douces Ce guide moi Je ne sais pas comment pour remercier te Autre puis pour Vous offrir mon éloge ____________________________________ Devotion The gentle hands That guide me so I know not how to thank Thee Other then to offer You my praise Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin Silverblade Posted July 19, 2003 Report Share Posted July 19, 2003 Beautiful. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Salinye Posted July 22, 2003 Report Share Posted July 22, 2003 Very beautiful. I wish I could hear it said in French. :0) ~Salinye Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted July 22, 2003 Report Share Posted July 22, 2003 *sighs wistfully* Angels speaking French always sound so beautiful... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Celes Crusader Posted July 26, 2003 Report Share Posted July 26, 2003 In English, its very good but her French version needs tweaking because some mistakes slipped. Allow me to correct them. Dévotion Les mains douces *1 Qui me guident *2 Je ne sais pas comment vous remercier *3 Autrement qu'en vous offrant mon éloge *4 *1 This part is correct. If you would have wanted a more poetic emphasis, you could have wrote "Les douces mains". *2 This is where "word to word" translations hurt. In french "qui" and "que" have the same use than "that" in English. "me" in French replaces "moi" when its used with a verb. In fact, the word "moi" is only used to designated the writer/speaker. *3 "te" and "me" are always used before a verb, otherwise it was nicely done. I've changed "te" for "vous" because, since you speak with God and used "vous" in the last verse, it was more appropriate. "Vous" is a formal way to talk to an individual and is also used when you talk to several people at once. "Tu" is used when you speak to someone who does not require such ethics (ie family, friends, etc.) *4 That one was another hard one to translate with the "word to word" technic. And its way too hard to explain why I did all the changes. Although that I can say that we only used capital letters at the beginning of a sentance and for person's and countries' names. Keep these coming thought as I always apreciate one's effort. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Regel Posted September 27, 2003 Report Share Posted September 27, 2003 Dévotion Simple and yet complex it is a beautiful poem in any language. I read it once and related to it on a mother child level, then read it again and saw another possible relationship. It sounds like a prayer. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annael Posted October 2, 2003 Author Report Share Posted October 2, 2003 I was going for the prayer Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoomGaze Posted October 26, 2003 Report Share Posted October 26, 2003 bien faites Annael, hehe Yes I do know how to speak french.. I guess living in Quebec comes in handy.. Ecrit plus, je veux en voir d'autre Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Celes Crusader Posted October 27, 2003 Report Share Posted October 27, 2003 *lol* Et toi Doom Gaze! Quand vas-tu nous pondre un chef-d'œuvre en français? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoomGaze Posted October 27, 2003 Report Share Posted October 27, 2003 ok Celes, j'en vas essayer un 'tit poeme en francais mais j'en ai besoin du temps... hehe et oui, vous avez tous le droit a me dire que ce n'est pas bon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Celes Crusader Posted October 28, 2003 Report Share Posted October 28, 2003 *lol* Chui pouiche en poésie, alors j'peux pas critiquer trop trop. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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