Gwaihir Posted March 8, 2003 Report Share Posted March 8, 2003 I always try to feel the plump skin split. But never can, it all happens to quick. I feel the shove through muscle though, after. There’s something sickly sweet about the smell The fear hanging limply, my joy and sweat. Silence, and you can hear their organs squish. I move. No sound. And then I strike. No ugly screams, just the golden silence. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WrenWind Posted March 8, 2003 Report Share Posted March 8, 2003 Gut reaction ............... very unsettling. It made a shiver run down my spine and check to make sure my doors were locked Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted March 8, 2003 Report Share Posted March 8, 2003 wow. Pictures deadly stilleto dance in dark alleys. wow. Pictures the eyes focused on THE spot of skin, dimpled between vertebrea, the only thought - will I feel anything but grating bone? wow.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaneus Posted March 8, 2003 Report Share Posted March 8, 2003 (edited) Makes me think of the mind of a serial killer. Good job. Edited March 9, 2003 by Archaneus Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blondemoon Posted March 9, 2003 Report Share Posted March 9, 2003 Like what Arch said, it makes me think of a serial killer...only a specific one, cause I don't think his victims made a sound. Jack the Ripper. *shudders* Very good, and very creepy Gwai. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lumpenproletariat Posted March 9, 2003 Report Share Posted March 9, 2003 *worries for Gwai* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nyyark Posted March 9, 2003 Report Share Posted March 9, 2003 Well done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SoaringIcarus Posted March 9, 2003 Report Share Posted March 9, 2003 I like the imagery this connects with a peach, for me. Like ripping open a sweet fruit, the fruit of your labor, albeit somewhat gruesome. Silence always offers a fulfilling finality. Good. I miss reading you. -Icarus Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted March 9, 2003 Report Share Posted March 9, 2003 Peredhil rereads this thoughtfully... Remind me not to mess with your Wiggly Cabbages... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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