Rahsash Geldich Posted February 18, 2003 Report Share Posted February 18, 2003 (edited) I think I'm on the verge of a nervous breakdown... I'm trying to not think about it. I don't know how I got here I'm about to go off and snap As I cannot stop from yelling When my bro goes "tap tap tap" Invisible drumsticks Beat into my brain Everything outside Covered in frozen rain Two inches of an ice rink Cover my entire world After a while I see no color Its just these greys all swirled There's no one in my house To free my mind to fly Away from this hell-wrought place Where no time ever passes by In a week I've lived so long My life has been stolen away Eternity has shrunk, it Encompases just one day Stuck in the house so bored I've liquified and am pooling Into a gooey mess That misses schooling And while to some its nothing Whenever I'm asked to tell Of my week to another It's as if, my soul I re-sell Edited February 18, 2003 by Rahsash Geldich Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaneus Posted February 18, 2003 Report Share Posted February 18, 2003 Wow! I believe this is the first poem of yours I've seen but by all means post more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted February 18, 2003 Report Share Posted February 18, 2003 i felt the same way... do what gwai told me to do... go play in the snow... it works revery the dreamlost "life's a song, you don't get to rehearse"(buffy) the dream continues... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandias Posted February 18, 2003 Report Share Posted February 18, 2003 Intense...you actually had me worried for the state of your sanity until I reached the line "that misses schooling", and it slooooowly clicked into place. Very Zool-ish: wickedly clever and amusing. Encore! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin Silverblade Posted February 18, 2003 Report Share Posted February 18, 2003 Wow, very cool. Strong, and powerful in every line. Beautiful poetry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted February 18, 2003 Report Share Posted February 18, 2003 dress warmly. Get out and get your blood pumping. take your brother out and throw snow at him. look at pictures of Australia and New Zeland on the internet. Write more poems. Write your inner thoughts and problems, your selfdoubts and criticisms on some paper. take them outside and burn them. watch them go up in smoke. I remember school as being one of my structured places - I loved school for the interactions, the people, the teachers, and the learning. I can relate to that line quite a bit. If you're between the ages of 14 and 21, you're more likely (genetically) to want to spend time with friends and acquaintances that family - school is usually the meeting place. hang in there please. Hugs Peredhil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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