Falcon2001

I've been there, and I know how you feel. Good poem, I'm keeping this one in my collection. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Really good one for being so danged short, really really good! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Really good poem, but that genetic line is a tad weird. Good stuff! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Hmm...This story always caught me as fairly stupid...I mean, they fall in love, then die, what, three days later? I mean, goddamnit, that's some dumb people. Meet, kiss, @#%$, and then die. What a life. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Very very excellent work, Yui! I haven't had the pleasure to read much of your work, but this easily fulfills all of the expectations I had from someone of your talent. I have heard so much about your work, and I see very little, but I enjoy what I see. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Attacked by mutants! Evil 'lol's eaten Falcon saves the day! Once more I write this And now, I fear, I'm so stuck Can't stop the haiku! Crash, leap and slice down Will, colliseum master Bows to audience Eyes wired open Too much Tales of Phantasia Sleep? Not until death. Deeper deeper down Into the Moria mines I forgot ring, AAAAAAARRRGGGHHH!!! I know the ending To all of the stories she told Is it a new end? Should I ask her out? Be brave and attempt a life? Nah, my life is fine. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Vincent, good work, but cut the crap with chris. I've been talking to him, and you haven't been the greatest friend in the world. If you really want to talk to him, go out of your way and do it, don't just expect him to change his life around to suit your needs. Sometimes you have to be a friend too. Good poem, again. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

I really enjoyed this poem, and felt a lot of emotion coming from it...which isn't really saying all that much because all of your work is HIGHLY emotional, drawing the reader into it. Keep up the good work! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Freeform again...strange for me, but I like writing this way. Snowing colder than the ashes in the hearth Raining harder than the heart in my chest Blowing faster than the end of days Ending Sharper than the sword in my mind Immediate closings to a life of disaster one without cause or meaning to hold life's greatest achievement comes in the closing a bitter feud with almost no end So gather up your hearts and toss them in the fire give yourself into the world don't mind all the fire it's just an illusion It won't burn if you believe hollow faith full of holes and dead ends trapping all of us to forward it's own ends so listen to the prophet and give yourself to the flames and hope that your soul will forgive Immediate closings to a life of disaster now give yourself up and hope for the best... Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Very very good stuff here, Rashash! Good god I hope I spelled your name right...but anyway, one thing I must applaud you on is the fact that the poem wasn't just Love, Dove, and Above rhyming over and over again...I swear, I get really ticked off at those poems. Good poetry, you're progressing quite well. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

*Falcon backs up a few steps from Andrea* Okay, now that's just plain creepier than hell. Good Poem...but creepier than hell. *Falcon maintains a good six feet between the two of them and looks at her rather strangely* o_O

(Conversion Confusion, this is the first post) Well, due to inspiration by the talented Porcelain (Sorry dear, but Heart like a Hole is too long to type all at once, so I'll just call you Porcelain), I'm going to try another freeform poem...not going to promise much, but it'll be there. They ask Why I wear black And I laugh and tell them Some inane answer designed to keep them away but would they shrink? If they knew the truth? Of my broken promises And the lies And the hatred boiling up inside? Would they run from me And my apopleptic rage If they knew where it came from? If they knew it was directed at them And their smiles and laughs And games that they play? Strange things happen In the mind of the damned They ask me why I'm depressed And I smile and nod And reassure them I'm fine But would they care? If they knew That the depression sinks deeper Although it's not there? With claws of ice and bone That shatter my hope? Would they care If they knew that the world was as bitter as it really is? If I lifted the curtain, opened a few eyes to the blinding hate that is LIFE? Would they smile then? Or would I be joined in my misery By a few more enlightened Damned souls Stranger things have happened In the land of the blind. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

*smiles smugly at the other pen members* SEE! Now who else could write something with this...this... *Waves arms around, looking for a word* ...incredibly cool stuff. Yeah, that'll have to do. Anyway, I'm amazed again at your vividity (Is that a word?) and imagery in this...wonderful use of words in this. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

I knew it was you, the name made me think, and the poetic style is the same, but I thought you registered under Porcelain. Anyway, welcome to The Pen!

I've always felt this way and never been able to truly express how it feels, I thank you sincerely for this poem. And about your name, no matter how cold or evil you think you or anyone else is, there's still a capacity for life. Trust me. I know. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

No, this isn't a cover of that one girl's song, Sweet Surrender. This is *Another* Sweet Surrender, there's another word tacked to the front, and the song's different. Actually, this is to a certain person, but geez, I hope this gets taken the right way and I don't get slapped. Oh, and by the way, this song kinda sounds like The Chemicals Between Us (I don't know who it's by, I think it's bush) Another sweet surrender lying in her arms next door Letting go of all my misery And holding her in turn We know of each other's flaws And all of the loneliness And we both fully understand We're too far gone to bless We've both faced the chaos And stood at the mirror before Clutching a knife in one hand And staring deep into horror They call me a sinner They call her a whore We both know the truth though We're ever so much more Can you know the answers The the questions never asked? Can you face the darkness With a soul so sweet and pure? Can you see the emptiness That lies behind the eye Can you taste the madness In the mind of one that did endure? Another sweet surrender Lying there and talking long About all the things that need said Without fear of being wrong And now I understand the words 'Friend' and 'Loyalty' Where once there was a void Now peace is all I can see I know I'll always be there Until the sad and bitter end I know that I will be there I'll be there for my friends To all of you that shunned me To all of you that pushed me down I'm leaving you for the last time To your petty life you are bound Can you feel the beauty In a person marred with life? Can you touch the cold space In the pretty little lies? Can you see the future In the everpresent past? Can you feel the hatred In a man betrayed once more? Another sweet surrender One that left me stronger Dying in that place Another sweet surrender Health is so much sweeter When you're dying in that place Another sweet surrender I cannot believe All she's done for me I don't understand it I just don't understand it... And I don't care Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Tired though you may be Yourself is the best you can By imitating others you steal a soul And leave yours without a plan We're all mortally tired with no chance of recompense And no way to ever return the favor the those that left the dents So we just keep on moving Defying reality to spit once more Into the eyes of the decievers And knock them down to the floor Always keep hope, and always be yourself, no matter what. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

This is a poem that I'm singing as I go, and it's coming along fine so far... If this comes out sounding like it's being written about someone, it's not, believe me. Heck, this isn't even about me. Well...no. It is about me, but the events contained herein aren't exactly about me. But some of it is me, in my rawest and most barren form. Life's bitter mysteries Why'd they mean so much to me? A simple task and answers too I'm leaving me alone with you There's way too much time without hope And not enough time to sit and mope I'm losing all my sanity Too late to care, too little free Life's bitter mysteries Why'd they go and beat on me? Why's my best friend crying alone? Why's the repo man on the phone? Why's the world full of misery? Why's the end the beginning? I'm walking out of my back door And falling down on the cold floor Life's bitter mysteries Why'd they leave me suffering? What's with all the stupid jokes? What's with all the rum and cokes? The alchohol, the drugs, the whore The knowledge that I couldn't store Why's the heat feel so like ice, And why's your body feel so nice? Life's bitter mysteries Why'd they kill me and then leave? Why's my mother so damn afraid? Why're my friends all getting laid? What's with the moon alone and bare I touch you softly, caress your hair I always loved you, just not like that A friend, a friend, I owe you that Life's bitter mysteries? Why'd they fill me with disease? Why's my blood worth so much to you? Why do you care if I go through? Straight on through to the other side A release found only in suicide But once more the knife falls down And clatters on the hollow ground Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Bunnies, Raist Welcome to the pen, BPO, err...unless you're already been here a lot...which could theoretically happen, considering who I am. Oh well... Good poem. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Jess, these are good poems, and I hate to think of the pain you're going through to write these. I wish I could offer you a little bit of solace and peace, and I'll do anything I can. You know that. Once again, really good poetry here. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

This is to the girl for me, wherever and whenever she is. I've dreamed about you a lot before You run through my mind like rain Without a message or a lore But from hurting me you refrain And I love you so much it hurts Even though I'll never know you Maybe we'll meet and then we'll flirt And then I'll say to you You're the woman of my dreams The one that's kept me awake late at night You're the woman of my dreams So nice to meet you, can I love you right? You're so beautiful under the moon In a star-filled imaginary sky You're brighter than the sun at noon And I'll never ask you why You love me, cause I'll know it's true The way that we love each other But you don't exist so I'm so blue Guess I'll go back to my druthers You're the woman of my dreams The one that's beautiful and kind You're the woman of my dreams So sad to have to say goodbye But you're a fiction of my dark mind Nothing but imagination and lies And so I'll wait for you in kind And sit alone and always cry You're a nice tale, but not so true A myth or a legend to me So I'll keep dreaming about you And how you might complete me You're the woman of my dreams So sorry you don't really exist You're the woman of my dreams And now I'm feeling selfish I sit alone at night and dream Of a lovely woman, that's you Who's always kind and never mean Life sure can be so really cruel So I guess I'll keep dreaming About the distant future And what it might hold for me And what it might not... And what it will not hold for me Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Duh he writes the best stuff, that's why he's peredhil with a !!!P!!!... Hmm...no. !!!P!!!eredhil just doesn't quite work...so I guess I'll just end up going back to the worship-peredhil-he-is-your-god-phase. Also, this one rules but I refrained from reading it due to the title, worried it might get me kinda depressed or something...then I remembered that most people don't write as depressive as I used to...so I read it, and I agree, it's a wonderful example of poetry... And once again Jess, duh, he's !!!P!!!eredhil. Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Ack my good lord up above, I can't believe I missed this one...wow. I can really identify with this one, since my risk-taking skills is limited to fearlessly drinking milk a day after the date on the bottle...other than that, I'm a bit of a wuss...oh well, I think I'll take this poem to heart, walk right up to that cute girl in band and... probably trip, smash some very expensive instrument and end up owing the school $1,200.00 for repairs. Wow, see what I mean? Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

(Conversion Confusion, this is actually the seventh post in this thread) Here's my 5-7-5s Falcon laughs aloud While flinging fireballs around At his classmates' heads In my mind and soul Music lives and breathes in joy The mind of a poet Sugar sugar lots of it All I need is found in pop 7-UP, you're my god Shapely curves always Pale as milk with heart of steel I love thee, guitar Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! SHINY!!! lol, good poem, I like your work. Keep writing this kinda stuff! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta