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My Dark Deed


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I sit in my room and waste away

As do you in your grave

What I did is now done

I cannot take it back

Would I if I had the chance?

Problily not

 

Everyday you came out

With your bright smile

Where you even human?

You never shed a tear

I never understood

Why you where so happy

 

So one night I came to your room

With a knife in hand

It was I killed the happyness

It was I killed you

And now I sit in my room

No one know who did it

But me....

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good POV piece.

 

of course, if it's not a pov, and is a analogy for your grim affect on a person who become close to you (also came to mind) then it is equally as good. The use of language is effective for both purposes :D

 

and I am totally wrong aren't I? but hey, that's what I see.

 

care to enlighten?

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...reminds me of lady Mcbeth after she killed the king... well the first and last stanza do... The 2nd stanza actually kinda of funny to me... it's like a yelling "what your so @#%@#$ happy about, die" reminds of me of blogger i used to know...

 

 

 

revery

the dreamlost

"out damn spot" (McBeth, shakespear)

the dream continues...

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