Ozymandias Posted February 14, 2002 Report Share Posted February 14, 2002 He stands ready, waiting for the next cruel slash Hands clasped tightly around his sword, grip barely wavering He thinks Where have they all gone? I want to be strong but not alone Not always As these thoughts begin to break his concentration it comes The enemy, leaping out of nowhere and in plain sight at the same time brings his wicked blade forward in an angled, eviscerating stroke He comes to his senses barely in time blocking only the lethal force of the blow He is staggered back and tasting coppery redness in his mouth Sizing up his opponent He hangs back unwilling to strike until he knew what was coming And they were there, all of them some had only just returned the others had been there locked in their own battles as well as the one who never left They saw the warrior engaged in battle in his eyes written doubt An arrow flew then, striking the hateful beast upon their comrade It jerked back, muscles spasming in pain It whirled for a second eyes glinting in hate as it set its brethren on the soldiers They plowed through the hideous ranks sword shield and arrow singing a mighty hymn Their comrade needed to know he was not alone The warrior saw his opportunity The beast's back was turned Still, he wavered until he felt a hand on his shoulder The One who was just out of sight but never out of reach Gave the warrior a nod and lent him his power Seeing the beast starting to turn and seeing his friends being hurt trying to reach his side The Warrior let out a Mighty Yell and struck at the beast with all his heart Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Jess Posted February 14, 2002 Report Share Posted February 14, 2002 I really like that one. I like the way it tells a story that means so much more. *Jess aplaudes* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted February 15, 2002 Report Share Posted February 15, 2002 Excellent stuff, Ozymandias. Takes precise, evocative images and an interesting visual narration and molds them into an enormous metaphorical masterpiece. Bravo. [image]http://members.shaw.ca/kea/am/wyvy.jpg[/image] ------------------------------ Almost a Dragon... "My life is one big crime, I try to scheme through it." -Common, "The 6th Sense" Owner of the Decanter of Endless Booze. Edited by: Wyvern00 at: 2/14/02 7:38:19 pm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gwaihir Posted February 15, 2002 Report Share Posted February 15, 2002 How splendid. I see many layers of meanings. A neat poem. ---------- I want to be page 93 of Pineapples, the Avian Crows-Nyyark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gyrfalcon Posted February 15, 2002 Report Share Posted February 15, 2002 *applauds* I like it. =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted February 15, 2002 Report Share Posted February 15, 2002 As you know, I'm sucker for Fantasy motifs. But I'm big on loyalty as well. You really know how to jerk my chain! fun read, well done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandias Posted February 16, 2002 Author Report Share Posted February 16, 2002 Thank you all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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