Ozymandias Posted February 17, 2008 Report Share Posted February 17, 2008 We danced Our fingers lacing and unlacing apart and then again We danced our bones folding and unfolding as a clockwork bird's wingbeats We danced shoulder to shoulder cheek to cheek We danced brushing, grasping, caressing without a touch We danced Twirling, curving, stepping tracing waves on dry land We danced we never kissed our eyes did more than that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silver WInd Posted February 18, 2008 Report Share Posted February 18, 2008 I really liked this, I liked the way the poem was structured, it worked well. Nice imagery. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandias Posted February 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 18, 2008 Thank you. Glad you enjoyed. :>) ~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted February 18, 2008 Report Share Posted February 18, 2008 Really like this! Tallying up my vote, the Eyes have it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da_Yog Posted February 20, 2008 Report Share Posted February 20, 2008 Lots of fun. I liked the way dance played out through the poem. It continually shifts in meaning while staying close to a common nature just off screen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandias Posted February 20, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 20, 2008 I emote much more than think when I write poetry (perhaps all my writing...?), and am VERY pleased this time it gelled so well with my premise. *bows* Thankee kindly for telling me (otherwise, I *wouldn'tve* known).. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted February 22, 2008 Report Share Posted February 22, 2008 word-painter, you did well. Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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