Merelas Posted January 20, 2004 Report Share Posted January 20, 2004 The Game Do not try to win the game— I warn you, it’s already done. If you come and try for fame, I warn you, I’m second to none. For though you may not know me, The game, it is already done. I can tell that you can’t see The game has already been won. Come if you will, try your hand. The results are always the same— No one alive in this land Can best me-- that will never change. I can see through anyone; You are all just two of a kind I warn you, it’s all been done, And my game is all in your mind. (Note: I reserve the right to use this for a heroic type test by a villian or other entity in some story later on down the road Comments will be much appreciated.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted January 20, 2004 Report Share Posted January 20, 2004 Someone is pretty cocky. What if the other person cheats? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tattered Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 Hmm, so this could be on the surface, a power trip, however I see much more. I could relate this to gambling, does anyone ever really win, eventually they will lose. Could be related to get rich quick schemes, as in the last senario, it would be the reader vs the "power"- the odds, the fix, the adversary. "Come if you will, try your hand. The results are always the same— No one alive in this land Can best me-- that will never change." The part "No one alive in this land" Are they spiritually dead from the never ending struggle to win a losing game? This could be about life on so many levels... Or who know's maybe it is just about how cool you are. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 Huh. I read it and immediately thought of Jesus the Christ. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alaeha Posted January 22, 2004 Report Share Posted January 22, 2004 I read it and immediately thought of the "Kid" from Robert Asprin's Myth series, in "Little Myth Marker." It could use some smoothing... but my brain is dead. I'll get to this later if you'd like. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Quincunx Posted January 22, 2004 Report Share Posted January 22, 2004 Six Months Dead. . .is a pile of grey (tone) matter Three Months Dead. . .still retains some features, like eyeballs Freshly Dead. . .is Alaeha asleep on the desk. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alaeha Posted January 22, 2004 Report Share Posted January 22, 2004 Piece has been dissected with a scalpel. Remnants PM'd back with suggestions for improvements. Note: Poems are not like birds. They work just as well when you take them apart to see what makes them work. ~A slightly less dead (more fresh?) Alaeha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beautiful Nightmare Posted January 25, 2004 Report Share Posted January 25, 2004 *giggles* someones getting full of themselves *oils your head so you can try squeeze your head through the door* good poem though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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