Chanz

Awwwwww. I to have been through this. It's horrible, but you DO have other TRUE friends that WONT leave you. I liked this. I could feel the emotion in it. nice job

Simple. Short. Sweet. A great combination. I really liked this. It was like the words cut through me and made me think. *NB. Nothing is ever bad enough that you feel your only option left is death* Nice Job

i was trying to get at how false society can be. Like we are all living under a mask. You look i smile. You cook i eat, even though it is vile. You turn around i frown. i fall to the ground but jump up, when you turn around. Why do we pretend to be something we are not? What's so wrong with showing how we feel? It's like trying to pass a winter's day off as being hott, It makes me ashamed to be real. I want to take off the mask show what's hidden. but, too scared to step out of my cask It's like there's a rule that makes it forbidden. Just imagine what life would be like if we were all real- no one was fake....

I really like this one. I find the flow to be interesting.... i think the message of us not communicating is reaelly strong, and i think it something everyone should try and work on in this world. Nice Job

Short but sweet! I liked this alot! Nice Job

I would NEVER hurt him, i'd just yell alot, and give daggers and stuff like that 2 show him that he hurt me. i could never lay a hand on him

I really enjoyed reading this. I liked how the attitude or mood changes. Nice Job

....My Mind Left all alone Wondering what mistake to make next Figuring out who will blow me off next, and where i will be blown All i have to go on, is whats written in this text. Left fearing for my life Trying to dodge everyone who is after me I don't think i can protect myself with this rusty old knife But perhaps it will set me free....

OMG- Very powerful. Very well writen. I really liked this, i've felt this way before, i think thats why i like it so much. should this be-Burning flesh SURROUNDS each victim?

Now i have found it, I can slowly claw my way out of the deep, dark pit. I've searched all my life, To find this one thing, that could drive me away from the knife. Finally when i was about to give in, And throw my life in the bin. I found what i have been searching for, The person, whom i could adore. It was love at first sight, I knew straight away when I saw him last night. I knew he wasn't like other guys, He wasn't a sleaze followed by flies. He is caring and kind, And takes over my mind. He looks out for me, And allows me to be free. But now that I have found you, You had better tell me everything true. And not break my heart, Or else i will hit you with my poisen dart.

I really liked this. It made me think, and it stirred up quite a bit of disscussion which is always good.

I'm happy, I'm high. No sign of ever being crappy, I reckon I could just about fly. Nothing could bring me down, Not a thing could ruin my day. My smile could not be mistaken for a frown, All my darkness has gone away. Then. I fall. I tumble in a downward spiral, Try to get out, but can't even crawl. I need another hit, Hopeless without it, Even if it's only a wee bit. It'd make me feel good, not sad, Make my darkness fade away, Take away everything that makes me mad. Hide me from the reality i can't bare, Make me safe in my little world, Give me illusions that people care. I get it, and i'm fine, It's like i never fell, Erases part of time. Makes me so happy, i want to yell. I'm flying high, Not going to get brought down again, Soaring up in the sky, Nothing can ruin me not even rain. It is a continuous circle of up and down, One day i'm up, the next i'm not, One day i may come around, and realise what i am doing is not all that crash hott.

~ Very Very short, but sums up my feelings, and is about all i can master at the moment~ Want to sink into the blackness, Never want to come out, Want to hide away forever, Want to do all this with out a doubt.

I want to run Run far away, Run from you Don't know where i'm going or where i'm going to stay. I need to get out I need to escape, Need a change of life Need to get away from all the red tape. Have to get far away fom authority Have to get away from these memories, Have to hide Need to escape from all the armies. Can't face another day in this prison Can't bare to see the looks on their faces, Can't put up with this any longer Sick of losing in all the races.

v powerful and moving. i like! Nice Job

i like! v nice and well writen. nice job

I wrote this today while I was in maths. It's not very nice, but his is how I feel Why do people care? Would people seriously give a damn if I was devoured by a bear? Would anyone miss me, Or would they just let it be? People come and people go, Close friends turn into a foe. Emptyness is here to stay, There is no escape or place to get away. It slowly eats away at you, Letting you know anything you believed in was never true. Pulls you down into a pile, Watches you struggle for a while. Then begins to play with and torture you, Laughing at everything you do. Letting you know, you wont be anything, Because you are nothing and they, are king.

WOW!!! That was amazing! You seem to love your daughter very much. I commend you on that. Nice Job

This poem is about a guy, but not a boyfriend or alike. It's actually about one of my teachers. Why do some people go behind your back, Even when they said you had their trust? The outcome makes me feel sick and black, Makes me want to kill them and leave them in the dust. Do they do it, because they were bored, Or because they thought they were helping me? Into them, my heart and soul I poured, What part of 'I wont tell anyone' did they not see? It makes me feel used and worthless, Hurt and full of anger. And feeling helpless, Do they think they can screw me round just 'cause i'm younger? If I had one wish, it would be to rid the world of people like that, Make the world an honest place. Even if it meant six years in combat, It'd be worth it, 'cause in the end I'd win the race.

I like the way this flows. It all seems to fit together nicely. I think you are an amazing poet. Nice Job

Very powerful and moving. I liked it. Nice Job

Very nice! i like the way you've summed up your feelings about your friends. Nice Job!!

Thx guys! i'm definately sure what you are thinking of, is not what I mean by the word huggle, it had nothing to do with hugs at all! it's just a stupid lil thing we have! sorri 2 disappoint anyone who thought they knew it!

The very last line, will only make sense to peticular male! Nobody around Stranded all alone. So quiet, not even the dullest sound Not even a far away ring from a mobile phone. Stuck in an all too familiar world No one to turn to, no where to go. The only thing around: a dead girl in the corner with her hair curled So desperate for anyone, even a foe. Want to get out; run away But not allowd. Something forcing me to stay Probable something like: I should be proud. I am anything but proud:so full of shame Wanting to go to a cave and hide. But I have to play in life: a screwed up game If only I had a scrap of pride. I mite be able to make it 'till friday But tuesday even seems a struggle. I hate this game: I don't want to play For one reason I stay: your big huggle.

OMG! so sad! but beautifully written Hit home so much. nice going!