Rune

You write such powerful, dark, raw, and ruthless poems. >__< They almost hurt to read at times. That does not mean they are bad, just means that they do a great job of portraying the emotion they were written about. Good job, well done.

Ooo, very good. I really like the imagery and how some of it is fantasy based. Great job, I think this is my favorite of yours so far. ^__^

The 3rd section appears out of place, and a bit forced..but the rest is works well together. I often feel the same way, so I can identify with this poem well. Thank you for sharing it.

Great poem Nightshade. Is there any chance that there may be a follow up one day that does explain what you found when you opened the door? Could be a neat project. I will echo Hopper's comments and say that my favorite (and what I feel is the most powerful) line is "Should I open the door with the clash of thunder and meet my fate?" Perhaps because it is more complex and vivid than the other lines. It sort of stands out in the poem, similiar to what I imagine a flash of lighting would do in a night sky..which would result in the clash of thunder.

Thank you Rev, Tassle. You guys are great. I know it tough to stop and write a comment on something, so I appreciate your time, your words..and your help. I am gonna let it sit for a bit, then go back in awhile to rewrite it again. That way I can get a fresh look on it.

I have been reading them as well Tassle, just taking me awhile. Seems someone picked up unreal tournie and wants to blast it every evening when he gets home. Try reading poetry with some aliens screeching in the background. None the less just be patient with me please. Im trying! But im small..and therefore my eyes arnt as big as Cyrils and it takes me awhile to read big words (welll cause my eyes are so small..and all...that) I will reply as soon as I can. Promise *nuzzles the kender and skips off*

The person above me likes to eat gummi guts..melted. and I apologize to the person above the person above me, as I jumped ahead of her and posted right before she did, therefore messing up the space time continum. I sorries.

Thanks for the nice compliments everyone. I thought it was kinda cute, cause it rambles. And it went from being rather simple to complex in the last few sections. I could go into the symbolic meaning of that, but I wont ^__^

The person above me likes Gummis! (ok well maybe not..but I like them, thats gotta count for something)

Today's Birthdays 1 member is celebrating his/her birthday today >Deadly Nightshade (16) Happy Birthday!!

hehe the story arc isnt done, just gotta put up the next part.

hehe, this one was for fun. Its a conversation between two people, one is a dreamer, the other is more of an analytical person. the willow tree it calls my name. how can that be? it has no voice, it cannot say. it simply sways. It simply sways? You dare not say. listen to it.. hear it? feel it? the willow tree it calls my name. you must agree its plain as day. i do not hear i must confess i really fear i do digress that tree you speak is very meek it does not say it simply sways. i give up your blind to see the voice this tree has given me this tree it speaks it calls my name and tells me things to write and say If you listen maybe the tree will share with you its misery or even its hope and plans for today then you will see and then agree it does much more than simply sway this willow tree will call your name.

*giggles at the top 5 part* hmm..id have to say its definately one of my 2 best. ^__^ Thanks for the nice comments guys.

The person above me is really kind and sweet, and makes me smile with his daily PMs of Zoolio goodness. ^__^

Symbolic of putting people on pedestals and then not listening when they request to be helped down. It was also written to attempt to answer a question I asked myself, but I wont go into details as they are not needed. Perhaps its a subtle reminder that often people are held in such high regards, that they might feel trapped in a world they consider never changing... I am not really sure. Written in about 5 minutes or so, reread once (so there is prolly spelling errors) and I am sure there are mistakes...but posted here (instead of the workshop) as it is complete and I do not plan on rewriting it. blood soaked feathers in a rusty cage cloudless sky cloudless soul a whisper for help not a scream or a cry no reason to live no reason to die this is your world your heart does not ache forever the same forever unnoticed unaware of the signs faith in illusions ignorant bliss ignorant pain belief in fiction no sense in truth consumed with idols consumed with beliefs a phantom visage a heavenly crown forgotten in love forgotten in remorse words spoken clearly salvation divine wings for ascension wings for declension the saga is over forever beloved by all those who knew her by all but herself

Having completely scrubbed off the red crayon marks, Rune steps back to admire her work. Rather pleased with the now shiny sign she turns to leave.

The person above me comes to mind every time I see a pengie and I always smile when I think of em.

The person above me has their very own wolf smiley and yeah I need to keep scrubbing. *goes off to scrub*

Oo, a very unique and interesting poem on the act of suicide and the galmour there of. You did an excellant job of creating a vivid mental picture through your imagery. After all the glory in the poem, the final question sort of punches the reader as well to really make them think. Thank you so much for sharing.

I like the echo of the first sentance through each section and then the sudden change at the end. its always been a technique I thought was interesting if pulled off correctly. The reader gets settled into a reading pattern and is then suddenly switched rather violently to make the final statement of the poem bold. Good job Hopper. ^__^ Thanks for sharing.

I sort of like the "idea" of recyling ones soul through suicide. (not that I am saying suicide is a good thing, mind you) Its just something Ive never considered before. Good poem, just like your others..although I will agree and say it's less harsh and therefore more appealing.

I think there are some spelling mistakes that are messing with my head.. Or Im just confused easily.

Its very powerful. Raw and Intense and Harsh are all good words. I echo the comments of those before me.

hehe that was kind of neat. ^__^

Short and sweet! (like me ) Thank you for sharing, its very valuable wisdom.