Amos Greywind Posted May 9, 2003 Report Share Posted May 9, 2003 The Crimson Tear My tears are ever flowing now, These tears of crimson red, They stain and spoil the ground asunder, Exactly why cannot be said. The fire within my eyes, Now burns down my cheek, Dripping from my chin, Making the future very bleak, The yellow moon is full, My feelings at a potent height, Both good and bad surface, As part of my unholy blight. Never to lose it, It will always be there, When I look within myself, I can but stare. My vision is clouded, With this damned red mist, My future so hidden, Oh how I shake my fist! Though anger only feeds it, And so doth fear, And when I think it’s gone, I feel it… The Crimson Tear. Well there she be, that is one of my favorites and I'm not totaly sure why... Amos Greywind Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chanz Posted May 10, 2003 Report Share Posted May 10, 2003 I really like this............it's got a certain something about it, that i cannot put my finger on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow of the Butterfly Posted May 11, 2003 Report Share Posted May 11, 2003 *blinks slowly* Magnificantly well done! I truly appreciate your talent. Keep them coming!! ~~ ~~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Salinye Posted May 11, 2003 Report Share Posted May 11, 2003 Very nice. :0) I like the format. ABCB DEFE HIJI Etc. :0) I'll have to try that some time. :0) Thanks for sharing!! Can't wait to read more of your writing!! ~Salinye Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin Silverblade Posted May 13, 2003 Report Share Posted May 13, 2003 It certainly has a mixed set of passions to it. At some points I can feel a very rigid emotion, and other times, despite the rhythm (never could spell that word) it turns to a chaotic passion. And both ways it's easy to see that the poem does display feeling - which I think is fundamental to a good poem. I enjoyed it, thanks for sharing bud! - Justin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gwaihir Posted May 13, 2003 Report Share Posted May 13, 2003 It is clear that you are in control of the rhythm, meter and emotions portrayed in the poem. This creates a pleasing effect aka I like it : ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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