Deadly Nightshade Posted February 9, 2003 Report Share Posted February 9, 2003 Knock Knock Deaths at the door should I answer it?... would it hold the key to my happiness? could it really take away the pain in my heart? maybe would it hold the key to others sorrow?. who would care? should I? maybe Should I open the door with the clash of thunder and meet my fate? is there really an after life? will I find the answers I so earn to know? maybe There is but one way to find out... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tasslehoff Posted February 9, 2003 Report Share Posted February 9, 2003 I hope there is an after life, cause I want to be re-incarnated as a Yea, that would be lovely... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HopperWolf Posted February 9, 2003 Report Share Posted February 9, 2003 wow, that's good. pasrticularl like the use of : "Should I open the door with the clash of thunder and meet my fate?" I think fate is such an interesting word in this context. the sense of unavoidable mixed with free will... very old conflict for human nature. You will meet death some time, but it is you choice to meet it sooner. Yet in meeting your fate you could close yourself to the fate that awaits you in living. Annnyyyhoooo, this is a very well written piece. reminds me a little of the raven among other things. while the format could be viewed as somewhat humourous (sp?) (I can't believe I can't spell that!) it's a very dark humour and lends weight to the graveness of the situation. I say go meet your fate in life. Death is always at the end, but once taken the other fates are closed. There is always time to find the answers you are looking for later... concentrate on the things you only have this life to do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jamesdevin Posted February 9, 2003 Report Share Posted February 9, 2003 An fate, afterlife, all things used to keep the fearful inline. If you want to live. Lock the door, don't open it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rune Posted February 15, 2003 Report Share Posted February 15, 2003 Great poem Nightshade. Is there any chance that there may be a follow up one day that does explain what you found when you opened the door? Could be a neat project. I will echo Hopper's comments and say that my favorite (and what I feel is the most powerful) line is "Should I open the door with the clash of thunder and meet my fate?" Perhaps because it is more complex and vivid than the other lines. It sort of stands out in the poem, similiar to what I imagine a flash of lighting would do in a night sky..which would result in the clash of thunder. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaneus Posted February 16, 2003 Report Share Posted February 16, 2003 I really liked this one and yes I agree with the others "Should I open the door with the clash of thunder and meet my fate?" is the most vivid line. I also like the way It sounds like the person's thoughts. It sounds lik they are confused and trying to figure things out and make a decision quickly. Great job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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