Rahsash Geldich Posted January 25, 2003 Report Share Posted January 25, 2003 I don't really care You've shattered me Scattered me Broken me into pieces And thrown me Into the wind. Your promises frozen Glitteringly delicate, When touched they distort And melt in my hands. Dripping onto the floor With my tears Splashing silently All to dust in the breeze. I don't really care But its so hard When ya'll are wrapped Rocking, pivoting- Dancers in a musicbox. I want to snap the lid shut So I won't see I won't hear I won't know But I have and it knaws. You're shredding Going into the dark You led me in We're both lost now. I can see the light But no matter of my call You're too lost to hear And you don't want to. In the darkness Of your musicbox You want your porcelain doll. So I wind the key Step back and smile The ghost that is faint Translucent lips grin. The music plays on As I hum the tune You two dance And I wish myself Painted porcelain So that I might dance And she turn the key Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rune Posted January 27, 2003 Report Share Posted January 27, 2003 Beautiful Rahsash.. just breath taking. Especially the last verse. And the imagery is so intense. I imagined a dark room with a solitary music box on a pedestal. Then a person came out, spoke the words and the images shifted from within the music box looking out to back outside looking in as the poem flowed. Great stuff, Thank you so much for sharing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted January 27, 2003 Report Share Posted January 27, 2003 Wow. You've still got it. There are some poems that make me think, "I wish I could write like that." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vlad Posted January 27, 2003 Report Share Posted January 27, 2003 *Digs into an unseen pocket and pulls out one of the little thing organ-grinder monkeys use* All comedy aside though, this is a very serene peace. Makes me smile about the simplicity, yet also about the provacative thoughts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rahsash Geldich Posted January 30, 2003 Author Report Share Posted January 30, 2003 Thank you very much, I appreciate your comments. And as for your comment Perehil, I read over this and I son't know from where I pulled it, some dark recess in the mind. Ah well, it reminded me of something lonesome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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