Falcon2001 Posted February 9, 2002 Report Share Posted February 9, 2002 The Word: I sat at the computer And tried to think Of all the things that you are And what you mean to me And I sat and I sat and I sat and I sat And I still couldn’t think Of a word or a phrase that IS you And I kept on thinking until it hurt So I Stopped And rethought it over And thought about who you are: You are lovelier than the starry sky More precious to me than life Your mind is keener than a knife And your smile could melt a glacier You are kinder than the healing hand And serenity is your tool You can relax me with a single word And you’re so trusting and full of love And you love me for just who I am… I sat alone at the computer Trying to think About what word describes you most: Is it love? Is it life? How about serene? Or kind, wise, loving and everything else All rolled into one? I searched through the dictionary Front to back , back to front And I found the word The word that tells me who you are The word that shows the world The word, the word, a simple word But one so dear to me The only word I ever found That word, my dear is Perfect Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Jess Posted February 9, 2002 Report Share Posted February 9, 2002 We likes! We likes! We wants more my presicous! Yes we doesssss! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gyrfalcon Posted February 10, 2002 Report Share Posted February 10, 2002 Ahhhh! Its Gollum! Back, back into the pit with ye! *brandishes Sting at it* I just got done reading The Return of the King, so I remember Gollum well. *grin* Anyway, as I said before, Falcon- I like it. *grin* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Jess Posted February 10, 2002 Report Share Posted February 10, 2002 LOL! I always thought Gollum was interesting. But I think Falcon messed up when he posted this one. Howver I've already told him that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted February 10, 2002 Report Share Posted February 10, 2002 Peredhil reads and gets starry-eyed. I love love poetry. It's the Elf in my I suppose. I vote a 'well-done' myself. It's hard enough to stay vulnerable to one's love, a little sincere cloaking behind hyperbole is just fine. -P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandias Posted February 14, 2002 Report Share Posted February 14, 2002 From one hopeless romantic to another- Bravo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted February 15, 2002 Report Share Posted February 15, 2002 It's funny... when I first saw the title of this poem, the image of a love poem devoted to the written word rather then a specific person was evoked in my mind. I originaly thought that you had meant that the one you held dear was 'the word' itself... Never the less, very nicely done... I particularly like the ending which is, quite frankly, perfect. [image]http://members.shaw.ca/kea/am/wyvy.jpg[/image] ------------------------------ Almost a Dragon... "My life is one big crime, I try to scheme through it." -Common, "The 6th Sense" Owner of the Decanter of Endless Booze. Edited by: Wyvern00 at: 2/14/02 7:48:35 pm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bhurin Posted February 15, 2002 Report Share Posted February 15, 2002 Bhurin sighs, his mouth smiling, but his eyes filled with some sort of reminiscing sparkle... Oh Falcon.... You... Well shoot! Bhurin quickly hugs Falcon, then looks around hurriedly, brushing himself off and beginning to talk with his voice deeper and more mannish. Well, uh, yeah... Very good poem. Very good... All joking aside, though my friend, this poem is so heartfelt! You prick a nerve many other poets try to with song or verse, but often fall short in succeeding at. Is it not often I come across a love poem that succeeds in describing the depth or sincerity of the love spoken about (personally I almost avoid this genre all together, as I have yet to find a love that deep; and feel I have no bearing to express an emotion I fail to understand or have yet to experience). But all too often people fancy themselves love poets, and are not (I know that sounds cold, but this is my only pet peeve in the world of poetry. Do you know how many poems with the words "love" and "dove" or "above" rhymed I have read? Do you know how hard it is to find one that doesn't?!) Bhurin stops himself, becoming mindful of his increased vulgarity and volume. Oh, sorry. Where was I? Oh yes.... You succeed with immesureable success to describe your feeling in this poem. I know that sounds mushy and all, but like I said I don't often find good love poetry, and I did so today. Your work is parrallel with Elizabeth Browning's "How do I love thee" poem. I really like it. Good word by the way. Good choice. You threw yourself out there on that one (I rarely use the word perfect). Your feelings, quite obviously, are sincere. I thank you. Signed- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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