Sweetcherrie Posted April 19, 2005 Report Share Posted April 19, 2005 A single bubble Lost in space Wanting stabilization That single bubble Was my own Looking for integration A second bubble Came in view Raising an expectation That second bubble Filled my void Succeeded infiltration Two single bubbles Became one And found their destination Inspired by a good conversation with Venefyxatu, and revised with help from Appy. Thanks guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted April 20, 2005 Report Share Posted April 20, 2005 I already liked it the first time, but after you revised it, it's even better. Love the simplicity of it And thanks for mentioning me, I'm glad to say though, that it's all your words only in the end, which is how it should be You should write poetry more often, Appy wants to see more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cerulean Posted April 22, 2005 Report Share Posted April 22, 2005 *claps in appreciation* Definitely one to be read aloud, I think. Thanks for posting this. C Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~O~ Posted April 23, 2005 Report Share Posted April 23, 2005 I tend to be rather neutral about poetry... I like prose better, because I feel that most of the time, poetry ends up giving up meaning in order to attain rhyme and rhythm. ~O~ However, I liked this poem. It's simple, but it evokes. ~O~ Oh, yeah... A verb like "evokes" demands an object. I'm feeling anti-grammatical today. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Curious Mylo Posted April 24, 2005 Report Share Posted April 24, 2005 I like this. It's really... I don't know the word, but it's good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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