Vincent Silver Posted October 28, 2003 Report Share Posted October 28, 2003 No one to warm me through the cold No one here to love and hold Only warm tears aginst cold skin to warm my soul Only bad memories to make my young mind feel too old Every choice I've made looks so wrong I just wish my time in this hell wouldn't be so long Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted October 28, 2003 Report Share Posted October 28, 2003 Hugs Good stuff - welcome back home. what do you think about making it hot tears, cold skin = warm soul. Avoids double use of warm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted October 29, 2003 Report Share Posted October 29, 2003 triple use within three lines, actually. and that would call on the "hot salty tears" image. welcome back, glad to see you posting! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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