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peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 727 (12/21/01 6:16:34 am) Reply ezSupporter I want! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A blow up of DaveMcW's insides on one wall, -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Does it come with all his accumulated knowledge? Good write-up! Turns to Falcon You know, that's well done! I was wondering how you'd woo her and still keep it PG. Good job. You're growing before our eyes. Food for thought for you by One who should know. (I have this posted above my desk to remind me. ) Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Bards of Terra, by Orlan Bards, as the old AMer's state, are the ones who readily post things in story format, in character, without flames, insults or anything other then jovial "kidding"-ness and readily are able to bring posts to a new level. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 131 (12/20/01 11:27:51 pm) Reply Re: the new room - 313 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Falcon- Wow. I just love the amount of detail you put into your rooms. The bed sounds interesting, and I bet you need the fire- stone walls and being surrounded by ironwork tends to chill the air. =)

peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 341 (10/29/01 12:51:37 pm) Reply the new room - 313 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- LOL!!! PENnet? I love it.

Falcon2001 Page Posts: 72 (10/22/01 9:42:14 am) Reply Re: Many Rooms of The Mighty Pen Keep Thread. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Actually, Individual people are supposed to describe their own rooms... as I don't know what goes on, or your interests... Yes, the keep is flexible, but I'd like alittle bit of a base. Cioden Darkeye Page of The Mighty Pem Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Ozymandias the Elder The Founder Posts: 70 (10/21/01 3:39:47 pm) Reply Re: Many Rooms of The Mighty Pen Keep Thread. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Interesting idea, but I think others may not like having the entire keep set in stone (pun intended). Personally, I think it's great fun and am absolutely torn between offering my own description of Ozymandias' room and leaving it you. Keep it up!

Falcon2001 Page Posts: 64 (10/19/01 2:55:21 pm) Reply Re: Many Rooms of The Mighty Pen Keep Thread. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well...it is a role playing thread...but I'd also like to have an image in my mind so that I can set stories here. That way, if you don't know how a room I walk into is set up, you can go check the thread. CiodenDarkeye Page of The Mighty Pen

peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 263 (10/19/01 5:59:22 am) Reply Many Rooms of The Mighty Pen Keep Thread. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I was pretty much treating this as a Role Playing thread. It's fun, but not locked in Stone (if you'll pardon the pun). The Pen's Keep should be mutable enough that it can fit any setting or situation the Role Play requires. Kinda like a Magical Univeral Studio or Disney World - very adaptable and changeable. It allows the Freedom to pursue the Muse without having to worry about breaking the 'Rules'. Just a thought... Peredhil

Jechum LoreMaster Posts: 103 (10/18/01 11:16:10 pm) Reply Re: Oops...another Many Rooms of The Mighty Pen Keep Thread. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Falcon, Let each member do as they wish with the rooms. I will give some simple advice... I would be careful what you do... due to the fact we will need the rooms cleaned! Edited by: Jechum at: 10/21/01 11:03:39 pm

Falcon2001 Initiate Posts: 60 (10/18/01 9:14:58 pm) Reply Oops...another Many Rooms of The Mighty Pen Keep Thread... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Does anyone disagree with how I set up the main rooms (Library, Garden)? You're all welcome to describe ANY part of the castle you wish, it's not just me, you know. WE CAN ALL be architects! CiodenDarkeye Initiate of The Pen Hopeful Patron Saint of Impatience Edited by: Falcon2001 at: 10/18/01 9:16:03 pm

Lady Celes Crusader Initiate Posts: 41 (12/15/01 1:17:42 am) Reply Re: I and all the things that shaped me (commentary) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Although that the fact that English is my second language and that my brain is making a double work to decipher first the words and then to interprete the meaning, the only things I can say is that this is excellent stuff and keep them coming

Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 128 (12/14/01 10:59:59 pm) Reply Re: I and all the things that shaped me (commentary) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hmm... not much to say as profound as Peredhil and Wyvern... I love your use of images, such as how pain hardened your heart (which is basically how it feels. =\) *Gyr applauds wildly* Keep going! Encore!

peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 695 (12/14/01 9:24:29 pm) Reply ezSupporter Re: I and all the things that shaped me (commentary) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Cheers I like this one! Golden opening, descent into a valley of gloom, but the has the feel of a triumphant ending. Like watching a really good movie! Must be good - you sucked a response out of me when I have no time! -P

Wyvern00 Elder of Initiates Posts: 286 (12/14/01 9:21:28 pm) Reply I and all the things that shaped me (commentary) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I realize the poem's not quite finished yet, Falcon, but never the less, a few comments right from the get go: I must say that it's excellent thus far. A possible rival to 'Happy Birthday... for my greatest enemy', depending on how ambitious you are to tell your entire life story through the poem (Wyvern liked 'Happy Birthday' a LOT...). Once again, a great beginning. Two things that I particularly like thus far are the abstract opening with the use of celestial imagery and your depictions of several depressing yet sincere themes. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading the rest of it. [image]http://www.legion-whiterose.com/signatures/aoa/wyv.gif[/image] ------------------------------ Almost a Dragon... "My life is one big crime, I try to scheme through it." -Common, "The 6th Sense" Owner of the Decanter of Endless Booze.

Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 127 (12/14/01 10:53:36 pm) Reply Re: Winter -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Nice images-- Hope mine stand up to the quality. *grin*

Zadown Bard Posts: 165 (12/13/01 6:22:27 pm) Reply Winter -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *laughs merrily at the mental pictures*

Minta Rose Bard Posts: 48 (12/13/01 2:50:41 am) Reply A Thrust into the Unknown -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- (by Chris Stephens, Assembly Room) Science fiction, a welcome addition. This reads easily and well, and is building to a long and grand plot. Characterization was swift and complete. Nothing constructive to add, as there's nothing which needs fixing.

Minta Rose Bard Posts: 47 (12/13/01 2:33:56 am) Reply Reformed, Part I -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- (by Gwaihir, Assembly Room) Tumbling tripping words, like a diary hastily written--like a person with more important manners occupying his mind--the sentence fragments and extremely short paragraphs make this effect. There is a shift of tense between the parts; the first is a flashback, the second a diary of constant snippets of the present. Each piece flows cohesively, and stands alone as well as tying to a greater arc. It could end at either part and not leave the reader unsatisfied.

Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 124 (12/12/01 5:10:27 pm) Reply Re: Sick -Your opinions please! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *Gyr laughs softly* Aye, I agree on the druggies and preps. Hmm... I think its pretty good, myself. Is it meant to be hard rock, pop, rap, heavy metal...?

Falcon2001 Page Posts: 140 (12/12/01 4:35:34 pm) Reply Sick -Your opinions please! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This isn't one of my better ones, but it is a SONG, not a poem. That's key to the entire song...to those who are not familiar with my work, this is NOT typical of my stuff. I had the chorus (I'm SICK) running through my head for days now...it came as I walk through the school during lunch, passing all the cliques in their little alcoves and territories. It just makes me sick, how the entire school has broken themselves into nice seperate little fragments, all bent on the destruction of the others...well, all except I guess the stoners and preps, they don't have the brain cells neccessary...THERE, EVEN I'M DOING IT! Cioden Darkeye Page of The Mighty Pen Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta

Lady Celes Crusader Initiate Posts: 25 (12/5/01 1:28:49 am) Reply Re: Celes French work -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- My thanks Jechum I'll give tips here and there when it will be appropriate.

Yui Temae Huntress Posts: 133 (12/4/01 3:30:41 pm) Reply Re: Celes French work -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Be careful, Lady Celes, offering me help in learning my French. *smiles* I'll most likely take you up on it. I hope Monsieur Arlequin wouldn't mind help in teaching me.

Jechum LoreMaster Posts: 198 (12/3/01 11:01:50 pm) Reply Re: Celes French work -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Jechum floats in... So fare Lady Celes you have been a breath of fresh air. I'm sorry to say I don't speak French, and I rarely comment. But I do like what I've read so far. Jechum floats out... Jechum Newbie, Mage of Shadows the Pen is Mightier than the Sword - Lore Master

Lady Celes Crusader Initiate Posts: 22 (12/3/01 10:55:17 pm) Reply Celes French work -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Feel free to place critic, comments, complaints or anything here. Also, don't hesitate to help me with my translations, go ahead. If you want to improve your French or to have tips to better write it, I'll help you witht the best of my capabilities.

Ozymandias the Elder The Founder Posts: 164 (11/27/01 9:23:39 pm) Reply Re: Cutoff! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I just started the story today, but noticing the Critic's comments, took a look at the end. Yep, that's a cutoff. Congratulations, Falcon! Longest post in the Pen!!! Seriously, try posting the next bit in a new topic thread. It should work. I haven't read very far, but so far, I like what I see. I too, reaaaaaalllllllllllllllllllllllyyyyy empathize with the name problem. Oy!

peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 395 (11/26/01 5:04:03 am) Reply Cutoff! -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Quote: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- “Well, in any case, let’s take a close look at the writing and make what we can out of it.” Cioden said groggily, rising to his feet and leaning against the wall. “Interests me most of all because I already guessed one part.” He pointed a bony finger at Andaria, his mouth twitching in a half-smile. “There is the ‘White that was stained’ my friends. Andaria went from order to chaos, then from white to black and fulfilling the small part of that prophecy…ugh, my head!” he suddenly clamped both of his hands to his forehead, his face in a grimace of pain. “Feels like an army of orcs are marching through my skull!” Sliding once more to his knees, he -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It's definite - from any computer I access - the story ends in the middle of a sentence for me. I'm thinking you've hit another first - maximum post size! -P