Peredhil

By redub, do you mean MST3k commentary? Perhaps the use of square brackets and italics would do it? [Brilliant thinking pre-coffee. I wonder what he can think once caffeinated?]

LOL!!!

Oi, I know this goat.

How could anyone not like you. You are now my favorite uncle too.

Peredhil wanders in to listen. Removing one of the dust covers from a plushy chair, he sits to observe, unaware that his Giant Guinea Pig bodyguards, Guido & Nuncio, have taken up positions in the shadows behind him.

Beautiful descriptions. Captures modern parenting well.

I pray that your problems work out soon. I LIKE your writing.

LOL. The saddest of sad 1%.

Too true, true too.

That's rather deeply philosophical.

That got a full belly laugh!

Brilliant.

Oh my Lady Gaga! (OMLGg). I needed a chuckle!

Oh dear...

Wow. Just wow. Gut-poetry. Nicely done; good to see you post again.

Peredhil wanders in and takes a seat quietly Hello old friend, welcome back home to the Keep. Still keen of mind, they sit in comfortable silence, only the flash of their eyes revealing a deeper communication of thought.

Interesting. Paragraphing would make a smoother read, helping to break it up for the visually impaired.

Nice!

I really enjoy this. Well done.

Right forum, and we'll done. Welcome back.

This type of crazy belongs here at the Pen!

Good use of line breaks to imply punctuation. Nicely crafted free-form

I do like the variety and complexity of your world-building. It's nice to see the rules of logic applied to a fantasy universe. That concept is the core of my FARS system.

When the madness overcame you, we all danced in a giddy joy, No more peeping out the veiled view, slowly separating alloy; We boldly taking turns at staring you down, splinters in silvered panes of glass. You fought for the surface - struggled not to drown, we won when combining en masse. Each jagged sliver life now, your sanity we overthrew, Personality? And how! When the madness overcame you. First line - In odd we place our trust

I'm pleased you shared.