Appy Posted August 31, 2003 Report Share Posted August 31, 2003 (edited) My feet wander forwards My head wanders backwards Back into time Reminiscing Days gone past never to be lived again closing my eyes pictures in the dark Joy and Sorrow Sweetness and Pain it's all here to be examined to be explained to be cherished here, in my head But my feet wander forward Ever to the future A glimpse of time Tomorrow will always be Yesterday [01 september 2003, Levekusen] Edited October 20, 2014 by Appy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parmenion Posted August 31, 2003 Report Share Posted August 31, 2003 Well I'm sure I do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted September 1, 2003 Report Share Posted September 1, 2003 I like it. I get the feeling you could expand it more given enough time. 1st stanza's a great starting point since it's pontenial for morphing into other set up lines is huge... But sometimes short and sweet is better... I recommend you try writting varations on your theme for fun. 3rd stanza worth a second look. revery the dreamlost "namaste(yoga)" the dream continues... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted September 1, 2003 Author Report Share Posted September 1, 2003 (edited) It is indeed the third stanza (so that's what they're called) that i'm not happy with, thankies for all comments how about: But ever my feet wander forward into the future I recognise A glimpse of time Tomorrow will always be yesterday Edited September 1, 2003 by Appy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL_Snake Posted September 2, 2003 Report Share Posted September 2, 2003 hmm, it seems to be an improvement. I like it, but have YOU decided yet Appy? =p Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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