Challenge/Assignment #3

[Alaeha]

I'll continue, I guess. Let's take something easy... Write at least Eight Lines of Blank Verse. That is, Iambic Pentameter with no particular rhyme scheme. If you don't know poetry well, that means that there are ten syllables in each line, with emphasis on the second, fourth, sixth, eighth, and tenth syllables.

 

Example:

 

What can be done to turn the clock of time

so that what has been done can be removed

from memory and history alike?

What can be said to heal the wounded heart?

The words were spoken with a careless thought,

regretted instantly, and felt as deep

by speaker as the one who was addressed.

What can be done to change the flows of time?

 

(As usual, I apologize for the low quality of my example...)

[Salinye]

*bump*

 

Bumping this up so it doesn't get lost before those of us who wish to try this can. :0)

 

I plan on doing it when I can sit down for a spell. :0) Thanks for keeping the poetic challenges coming, I feel I for one, am greatly learning from them!!

 

~Salinye

[Psimon]

The machine

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It's gears are rolling, beating rhythm time.

Fire jets from ports upon it's back and burns

the sky without a reason but to paint

a bruise of black the blue upon the air.

I can't remember times as bad as this,

when all I did near choked me to my death,

and each and every step I took could be

my last upon this ball of rock, my world.

Yet day by day I trudge through darkened mist

no purpose yet, no reason of my own.

 

 

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I beat my hand black and blue against the desk trying to get the emphasis right... I hope my broken and bloody hand served me well and I managed to do it ok...

[Peredhil]

Wow.

I've tried on three occasions to do this assignment, and I'm just not able to get into the iambic meter, better yet a pentameter.

brutal!

I'm gonna have to come back to this. For some reason, I'm not 'hearing' the stress in my mind's ear.

 

Have you ever noticed that the stanzas for the song, "They're coming to take me away" has hard stresses on all the even syllables?

[Alaeha]

I give apologies to all who find

this challenge hard. I hoped that it would come

with ease, but find that such was not to be.

Blank verse is difficult if one's unused

to forms of rhythm, meter, syllables.

And so, if it should be preferred that I

should not use meter in my challenges,

just make it known, and I will make it so.

The basics must be taught before advanced

techniques, or writing cannot be enhanced.

 

(Ok, so there's a rhyme on the last one... My apologies)

[Salinye]

Errrr not sure if I actually did it right, you'll have to tell me. :0)

 

This wizardess is far from through, so don't

go dumbing up your challenges. For if

we wish to learn and grow then we must stretch

ourselves to heights not yet achieved. My friend,

I appreciate all that you have done

to help this girl in her endeavor to

find some poetic verse within her soul.

**EDIT**

 

This wizardess is far from through, so don't

go dumbing up your challenges. For if

we wish to learn and grow then we must stretch

ourselves to heights not yet achieved. My friend,

I value greatly all that you have done

to help this girl in her endeavor to

find some poetic verse within her soul.

 

Better?

~Salinye

[Alaeha]

Appreciate was one syllable off. It started with the unstressed uh sound where a stress belonged, thus throwing a couple of feet in that line completely out. Most of it though seemed to me to be, (if I may steal the words of Peredhil) Just Write.

[Ayshela]

*nod*

for appreciate it would have worked better to have

"i value greatly all that you have done"

 

otherwise, well done!

 

i'll address this challenge when i have a few moments with brain in hand.. err.. in gear.. or something like that. have to finish my story first, though.

[Alaeha]

Much better. Though it's not as if there's much to appreciate... I spend perhaps as much as ten to fifteen minutes composing any given challenge... spending 45 minutes on something like this isn't much of a sacrifice, particularly as I rather enjoy it, myself.