gjunon Posted April 20, 2003 Report Share Posted April 20, 2003 (edited) Walking amidst shadows Walking alone now Crying finding myself Standing amidst the ending flows of life Which way to turn where to go whom to talk to where to stay Turning seeing an end the pain in my heart Finding the path to end all ends To finally be able to say I did it I prevailed In the end were you awake or crying or running from yourself Are you alive as I am now Will it be glory in the end will I see the light A single tear falls from my cheek splashing against my hand Kneeling down beckoning the end to come I am here now I am finally free Falling now a feather falls faster The crimson blood taking its toll Breaking all of my life threads The end is here now I can finally rest Edited April 20, 2003 by gjunon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tralla Posted April 20, 2003 Report Share Posted April 20, 2003 I find it interesting how, although there's not a speck of punctuation in the whole thing, you can still read it easily, and even see where all the punctuation would be, in a more formalized story-type format. That's cool. Well done, gjunon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gjunon Posted April 25, 2003 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2003 yeah i know i am horrable with punctuation anyhow my next poem will deffinatly have some in it so i can appease you guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted April 26, 2003 Report Share Posted April 26, 2003 oh... you don't have to appease anyone... if you want to go free form, go free form... we won't stop you. revery the dreamlost "abort, retry, ignore..."(dos?) the dream continues... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Salinye Posted April 26, 2003 Report Share Posted April 26, 2003 I really liked this poem. It seems to me it would be a great poem written as a favorite hero or even enemy in a story finally finds their mortality. :0) Thank you for sharing! ~Salinye Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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