Rahsash Geldich Posted March 21, 2003 Report Share Posted March 21, 2003 Lost from the world Alone I roam With my faith as a beacon Those around see They don't understand But all see Sometimes I wander with the Lost fires already in their eyes dancing along their flesh ashen tears down plastic faces and permanent masques Their glowing auras Clash against mine Flickers of lightning Insinuate ideas That toy into my mind Only to be snuffed out By my own shining; Urethral and tangible Away to the darkness By the Power Diamond among rhinestones All glittering and beautiful Some, even more coveted Than the truth within But destruction will leave One to go on high The rest left in shards Abandoned to the breeze I try to fit into a setting none are prepared ready for me Able to contain me Even I don't know Where I fit into This messed up world Why I am so different For having hope Allowing myself To believe in something Knowing without Ever seeing Holding for truth The unverified And being saved By blindness So I wander on Safe in my light Able to place My worries all safe from my own heart And I am special I am the Nearly Lost Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted March 22, 2003 Report Share Posted March 22, 2003 I think I might go back and punctuate, but the line breaks do force implicit pauses. Having a light Is a great advantage In looking at others. A feeling of superiority Of being able to see clearly Can creep in. But you can use your light To help others sparkle, Or use your light to work on your own flaws, Or use your light To avoid the snares Into which others stumble Painfully in the dark. The light is a gift, Like having eye color, What will you do with it Becomes a question. If you are hated By those wallowing in dung When you show them their make-up Is it a wonder? It's a choice To continue. Will you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whynotsin Posted March 23, 2003 Report Share Posted March 23, 2003 Nearly lost sound like I read it in another post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rune Posted April 9, 2003 Report Share Posted April 9, 2003 The imagery is vivid and intense. Does a great job of personifying the "lost.” Structure and proper punctuation might help a bit to keep the reader from losing their spot in the poem. Overall an excellent read. Thank you for Sharing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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