Vlad Posted February 14, 2003 Report Share Posted February 14, 2003 Take me away, From these people. Let me free, From this place. Release my soul, To wreak havoc- Upon the realm, Infinity rocks past. I watch you barrel, By and by life spins, As of now it seems, Not only I am pained. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Scarlett O'Harpy Posted February 14, 2003 Report Share Posted February 14, 2003 Infinity rocks past I love that line, that image, Thanks for posting, Harpy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zariah Posted February 16, 2003 Report Share Posted February 16, 2003 My favorite stanza is the last: " I watch you barrel, By and by life spins, As of now it seems, Not only I am pained. " I think this could be added to.... Perhaps a new stanza that describes what esle you are other than pained. (Just a suggestion?) You have a creative way of phraseology. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rune Posted February 25, 2003 Report Share Posted February 25, 2003 I agree, Infinity rocks past is a strong statement. It holds it own well in this poem. Took me a couple of reads to really understand the meaning. Not sure if i have it, but I think I do. I connected in a way that's kind of hard to explain. Thanks for sharing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vlad Posted February 25, 2003 Author Report Share Posted February 25, 2003 I wanted the poem to end in a jolt, and i guess I underestimated the infinity statement... I had just got done doing math homework, I guess... lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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