reverie Posted March 17, 2002 Report Share Posted March 17, 2002 Hiya, in a bind, short on time. gotta write fast - to make it last. Two lovers sit longing, looking out on the sea. One lover's a boy, only barely a 16. But he dreams of his fortune and what he could be. And the other just weeps 'cause she's sure she can't see -- herself in his eyes when he looks at the sea... A tear from green orbs... runs down her soft cheek And she knows he will leave her for what he could be. A boy could be lover, and adventurer be. But only wants truly to quest on the sea. okay gotta go... later revery the dreamlost "strike a beat, add repeat, do over again...) the dream continues... Edited by: reverie at: 3/18/02 4:19:08 am Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annael Posted March 17, 2002 Report Share Posted March 17, 2002 well written...I got goosebumps. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Falcon2001 Posted March 18, 2002 Report Share Posted March 18, 2002 Really good one for being so danged short, really really good! Cioden Darkeye Quill-Bearer - The Pen is Mightier than the Sword President of the Peredhil Fan Club Owner of the Reply Raven - Enemy to all those who never post responses Ashaman - WoT - Blitz II Council - The Hunters - Blitz II Leisure Officer - SFV Ultima - Beta Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted March 18, 2002 Author Report Share Posted March 18, 2002 thanx... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lord Seth Exodus Posted March 18, 2002 Report Share Posted March 18, 2002 Bravo! The imagery is so vivid in this, even with so little said. I like this a lot. The idea is timeless and unique. Good job. -Seth Exodus Initiate of The Pen Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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