Rahsash Geldich Posted January 27, 2002 Report Share Posted January 27, 2002 For you I know my heart does seek, Your words still make my body weak. When you're around, I can't seem to think Brown eyes search my soul; watch me sink. Fate loves to sit with a self-satisfied smirk- I am his warped little piece of handiwork. I am falling into a gaping abyss- Your outstretched hand I somehow missed. But people caught me, falling from you. You took all the color, but greys are pretty too. Fate loves to sit with a self-satisfied smirk- I am his warped little piece of handiwork. I will learn to be happy without your touch But do not think I won't miss you a bunch. I cannot sit around waiting for you, Even though I know you love me too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gwaihir Posted January 28, 2002 Report Share Posted January 28, 2002 I like it! Someone else who likes to write in iambs "You took all the color, but greys are pretty too." I really like that line! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rahsash Geldich Posted January 28, 2002 Author Report Share Posted January 28, 2002 :blushes:: ty, I liked that one as well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted February 5, 2002 Report Share Posted February 5, 2002 Y'all cited my favorite line - but then, grey is my favorite 'color' (I've been told grey isn't a color, but rather a shade or hue or some such nonsense (don't you just love parens? (I do,))) and has been for a while. You have a nice sense of 'flow' in your works, and a curiously haunting touch. Some of your lines rise up when I'm done, at odd moments and I have to pause to remember where I read them. I like the way your poetry affirms your worth. A pleasant thing to read in one whose poems are so worthy. -Peredhil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rahsash Geldich Posted February 6, 2002 Author Report Share Posted February 6, 2002 :: Blushes again:: Glad you think so, poetry is a good outlet for me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Lord Seth Exodus Posted February 7, 2002 Report Share Posted February 7, 2002 Indeed a fine piece of work, Rahsash. I really like the way you keep coming back to: "Fate loves to sit with a self-satisfied smirk- I am his warped little piece of handiwork." (The proper poetic term for this escapes me) It paints a vivid picture of the trials, and tribulations of life, and more specifically, love. Bravo! Very nice, indeed. I hope you post more soon. -Seth Exodus Initiate of The Pen Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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