Fluke Posted March 11, 2016 Report Share Posted March 11, 2016 Disclaimer - I write for fun and rarely retouch my work, but I really welcome feedback, critical or otherwise. --- Sing for me He said And so I did Sing harder He cried And so I did Lift your voice to the skies And so I did Lift your voice to the Heavens! But my voice cracked The sound was lost And he left me Sing for me He said And so she did Sing harder He cried And so she did Lift your voice to the skies And so she did Lift your voice to the Heavens! And so she did She was perfect So he worshipped her. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cryptomancer Posted March 11, 2016 Report Share Posted March 11, 2016 *smiles* I do like your work Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted March 31, 2016 Report Share Posted March 31, 2016 Good use of line breaks to imply punctuation. Nicely crafted free-form Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TLDunn213 Posted May 3, 2016 Report Share Posted May 3, 2016 Zatar like. (And it's good to see that others, whose opinions I've come to value, also like your stuff. Looking forward to more.) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fluke Posted May 4, 2016 Author Report Share Posted May 4, 2016 (edited) Thank you all! I tend to only write in free form. Haiku's were the only form of poetry that they managed to impress on me properly at school. Sonnets terrify me. Edited May 4, 2016 by Fluke Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cryptomancer Posted May 5, 2016 Report Share Posted May 5, 2016 Ooooh... write a sonnet! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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