"How Many Words" and "What Would You Do If I Asked You To

[James Crow]

These are two poems. One writen awhile ago but never posted....at least I don't think I did?...and the other is one I wrote at work, insanley yelling at myself trying to make it work, then doing a victory dance. I know you guys/gals didn't need to know this, but I felt like sharing, so there some insight into my method/madness.

 

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How Many Words

 

They say a pictures worth a thousand word,

And perhaps that's true.

But how many words must I give,

To have one more day with you.

 

You haven't been gone so long,

That I've forgotten the jokes we shared.

Or those many nights,

We showed each other we cared.

 

It hurts so much without you,

I don't know how I stand.

And I know this was never part

Of our master plan.

 

Now my eyes sting,

As the tears fall like rain.

And there's no way I can continue

To mask all this pain.

 

Now I'm begging

With all my charms,

Asking how many words must I give,

To have you back in my arms?

 

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What would you do if I asked you to dance?

 

Would you take the chance

and risk the fall,

as I guide you to the floor.

As we sway in a trance,

our eyes tell it all,

and you know it won't be like before.

Would it leads to romance.

Would you accept the fall,

hold me close, and ask for more.

Would you smile as I advance.

Because after all,

we all know the answer for,

When I ask you to dance.

[Brighid of Byrness]

Hey, James!

 

Two heart-felt poems; is the muse the same for both?

 

You've got a good start on the second one -- just needs to be cleaned up a bit. I really like the rhyme scheme...it's like a waltz of sorts (for those of us who aren't ballroom dancers)...one, two, three...one, two, three.....

 

[James Crow]

I can happily say that the muse is not the same for the both, and if I told you who the muse was it would change the poems.

 

Also thank you for the compliment, and I'm glad the second one felt like a walts, since I was trying to go in that direction.

[Peredhil]

Good stuff.

 

I do like the choice of words, and the way they fit the rhythm.