kdb123 Posted October 21, 2011 Report Share Posted October 21, 2011 (edited) The days all mix together, With dreams of days past. My smiles and my tears, My hopes and my fears. What worth is left, in life these days? An emptiness that leaves, Me empty and alone. A new day dawns, Bright and promising. Should I hope, For better things? When everything is dark, Any light seems brighter. Is it a false dawn, Or the thing for which, I dare not hope? Edited October 21, 2011 by TheOtherOne Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted October 22, 2011 Report Share Posted October 22, 2011 This really captures the emptiness and exhaustion after a relationship dies. I remember feeling this way. In the chasm of exhaustion Broken deep inside Tried too hard Clung to the past My heart ripped open wide, I could not envision yet (Limited point of view) Futures bright Well worth the fight Depression has no clue. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harmonious_Echos Posted November 5, 2011 Report Share Posted November 5, 2011 (edited) Hey...is this turning into a topic poem line? I can do lonely and depressed pretty well...altho lately my style has been more of the 'goofy lame' type... by the way, nice job both Peredhil and TheOtherOne...those are good, they express emotions very clearly... Edited November 5, 2011 by Harmony Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted November 24, 2012 Report Share Posted November 24, 2012 The days all mix together, With dreams of days past. My smiles and my tears, My hopes and my fears. (nice, not sure why, but it just works, ya know) What worth is left in life these, days? An emptiness that, An emptiness that (The god of Pathos, says go for it, and let it linger, as you shake you're head and smirk a little when you say it on stage) A new day dawns, (Not sure, how you're doing it, but you're making it work. It takes something really genuine to make a cliche work for you, ya know) Bright and promising. Should I hope, for better things? (tweak) When everything is dark, Any light seems bright. (tweak) Is it a false dawn, Or the thing for which, I dare not hope? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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