why i fight

[Savage Dragon]

The night is young

so am i

Yet still i fear

that i may die

If i move too slow

or blink an eye

because i face evil

and i don't know why

 

no one said i must

called out my name

i chose this path

thats brought me no fame

i have no powers

to help me tame

these evil powers

but its still the same

 

though i be but man

i still will fight

against the darkness

that haunts the night

to steal and kill

and hide the light

it may not be easy

but i know it's right

 

innocents cry

do they hear, no

though they are many

will i fear, no

why i fight

now i know

its who i am

i am a hero

[Zepheri]

You are super hero I like this poem, you did really well on the rhyming! I could never do that. But I can see you in a cape ready to save the day!!! It's cute.

[Sweetcherrie]

Once again, glad to have you back and writing

 

I liked this poem; the flow is good and pulls me through to the end, and I *really* like the idea of the simple hero, cause in the end we’re all heroes in our own personal life; holding off whatever darkness there may be for us.

 

There are a few small suggestions I would like to make…

 

First, the use of a small ‘i’. Not sure why you did it here, but in the beginning it felt appropriate, since the person is feeling that he/she has no powers. Towards the end I would however give it a capitalized ‘I’ since here it is clear that that person is the hero.

 

Also, you use the word powers twice to end a line; I think it might be nicer if you would try to find something else for one of them.

 

Lastly, I miss punctuation in the first three stanzas, and then you do use it in the last. I’m never too sure on where and how to use punctuation in poetry, but there are definitely some places where it feels it could use a comma.

 

Anyway, all in all I very much enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing it with us