Xaious, Master of Time Posted June 10, 2005 Report Share Posted June 10, 2005 And, technically, I did this one about a month ago...so...Tell me your thoughts, for I tell you mine. Feel a nagging, within mine head. Exerting me, inciting dread. Nay understanding will I shed, Lest with dread am overfed. Concern, emotions Running hot. Boiled and simmered Much and lot. Concern's cause well known to We, Nagging fear same we see. Troubling so far so much, Near to tremble want that touch. Agony and righteous longing, Understand through my song sing. Other voice whose perversion seen, Makes use desired and mine edge keen. Just concern for not me, And a face I cannot see. Obstacles winning nay, My heart and mind within I pray. Yet let to others this be known, Never yet severe as have shown. Soothed by verse and words this day, Now to We feel, see I OK. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted November 21, 2005 Report Share Posted November 21, 2005 Oddly fascinating twisted word order. I could read several things into this, but I'm not certain that any of them fit the whole. I did like it though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sweetcherrie Posted November 21, 2005 Report Share Posted November 21, 2005 thanks for bumping this one Peredhil Nice poem Xaious, it reads like a waterfall, and it was certainly a pleasure to be dragged down along the lines with it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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