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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

Just a little quiet


WrenWind

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silence is such a rare thing

motors hum

pipes still ping

 

out side the snow blankets all

muffling the sound

of city tall

 

but still the sound

of the bustle

comes from all around

 

some times I need to hide

from all the noise

and people tide

 

walk in the wood

lie down in the loam

silence is good

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oooh wrenny!!! i like it in the way it makes sense of everyday life...however the only thing i dont like is the rhytm from the first 2 stanzas' first lines...a bit too long as compared to the following lines (the rhytm from the other stanzas fit quite perfectly i think)...just my two cents =]

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