Snypiuer Posted March 15, 2004 Report Share Posted March 15, 2004 If only I had the strength. To tell you how you make me feel inside. With but a word, I'd move mountains. And turn back the highest tide. If only I had the courage. To take you in my arms. I could tread the darkest depths of Hell. With out the slightest fear of harm. If only I had the power. To show you, How much I really care. I'd show you Paradise. And how Angels fill the air. If only I weren't so weak. These things and more, I'd do. In hope that may be. Just may be. You'd understand. How much I love you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Merelas Posted March 18, 2004 Report Share Posted March 18, 2004 It sounds like a song. I really enjoyed it, the varying stanza and line length was very good. I don't know what I could suggest that would make it better, but I liked it Keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlackCagedHeart Posted March 18, 2004 Report Share Posted March 18, 2004 Suspenseful no doubt! It left me hanging on at each ending of another line. I love the feeling that you need more and then it makes its way to you. Bon Appetitu! I can sense your longing to do such things, but refrain from it because some internal force can't allow it. (I feel all "moody and poetic" today. Forgive me!) Great job. BlackCagedHeart Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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