Vlad Posted October 17, 2003 Report Share Posted October 17, 2003 (edited) great big world and a tiny me everybody thinking similarily how would insignificant little i break the chains and voice a thought of individualy under waves of rebuke THEY force one to conform to agree with the words THEY hold dear a tiny me alone all by myself facing clones of the mind and slaves of the body a speck of dust in the wheel of the great UNIVERSAL machine well oiled smooth operation but i clog the cog THEY are right always so right and constant me is called wrong one day one will rise above the rest of THEM but for now it is know that i dont matter in the scheme in this machine of repetition of ideas centuries so old Edited October 17, 2003 by Vlad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted October 17, 2003 Report Share Posted October 17, 2003 whoooooaaah... wow thankyou. this part here: how would insignificant little i break the chains and voice a though individualy under waves of rebuke THEY force one to conform to agree with the words THEY hold dear i've been trying for weeks to find some way to wrap words around these thoughts, and here they are.wonderful! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin Silverblade Posted October 17, 2003 Report Share Posted October 17, 2003 (edited) Vlad, I read it. The poem was good. It was really good. If I could make one reccomendation - a slight editing. I don't know if you meant to leave the "i" uncapitalized, but if you were to capitalize the rest of the lines and leave the "me" and the "i" uncapitalized, it would certainly have a larger impact. But either capitalizing every line or selectively, I would humbly suggest some thought into it either way. That aside, I really liked it. The message was well expressed. As for personal motivations, I'm sorry there was any reason to write this. I *think* I know where you're coming from. That feeling can really be depressing, and lonely - but I'm sure there's many a person who would hear you out, if you want to speak. They're all a PM away. Thanks for sharing though. It was well written, and a powerful message. - Justin/Enos Edited October 17, 2003 by Justin Silverblade Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beautiful Nightmare Posted October 17, 2003 Report Share Posted October 17, 2003 Yey this is cool i like it alot reminds me of metallica unforgiven for some reason very good me likes alot! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vlad Posted October 18, 2003 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2003 Choice (for Thinas) A choice or dream Is mine alone, But the meaning is For more to learn. That life is not, as it may seem- And we are all just flesh and bone- A mind is everything that one has- And it is for him - enough to yearn. But with visions or no Some must still decide, What they are to do now, And what they will let slide. To each their own - what opinions may be But until that time, none will live free. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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