DarkPainInside Posted October 10, 2003 Report Share Posted October 10, 2003 Hopefully better than my last (weird) one.... this was written in school, in a french class. (Dont ask! ) *WEEK AFTER WEEK* Mindlessly I sit here, Day after day, Entertaining thoughts of suicide, And running away. Lifelessly I sit here, Week after week, With my façade up, Thinking of the long sleep. Helplessly I live here In a society of pain Looking straight ahead Trying to reclaim my brain Aimlessly I sit here Smiling; all is fine Striving to stay alone; Pretending my life is mine Hopelessly I see here A future that is bleak After I am done sitting In school, week after week. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted October 10, 2003 Report Share Posted October 10, 2003 *nod* *hugs* that much, at least, hasn't changed since i was in high school. i'm sorry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beautiful Nightmare Posted October 11, 2003 Report Share Posted October 11, 2003 *smiles* i understand about you writting it in french i think its boring i like french but well i mean its school wat isnt boring! *hugs* u write alot on suicide! *hugs agian* It makes me sad to see others in the depression possition as i was and still am i know how it feels and i wish other people couldnt feel it cos its just...horrible! *hugs* Love the poem and the rhythem i cant spell today dont mind me! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kalypso Posted October 12, 2003 Report Share Posted October 12, 2003 It's well written. The "I" within the piece of works seems severely depressed as if his/her's life is spinning out of control and nothing can be done to save it. Suicidal ideation is never a good thing. If the "I" is the author, I hope you're okay. Poems like this worry me. *hugs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tamaranis Posted October 12, 2003 Report Share Posted October 12, 2003 I like the effect it gives when the title is repeated at the end. It works well here. With apologies to Billy Joel: The good old days weren't always good, and tomorrow's not as bad as it seems. I should make that my sig or something. I hated highschool with every ounce of my being, but things picked once I got clear of that bloody mess. I'm really bad at encouragement... especially when it's only over a message board... Thought I'd give it a go anyway... It's not working too well... I hope things start looking up for you though. And to answer Arwen's question: Biology. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peredhil Posted October 12, 2003 Report Share Posted October 12, 2003 It saddens me when I look at the creative, intelligent, good people who come here and post suicidal poetry. It saddens me because I lament they have reason to post it. but I'm very glad to be part of a place that a poem like this can be posted, and the person understood and not judged, where people don't run shrieking away in horror at the very idea of suicide, but instead do whatever they can to help. Hugs Dark Pain Inside You have talent, and I encourage you to keep using it, no matter what subject matter. I hope you'll find healing and joy, so that you post rainbows instead of storms. -Peredhil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted October 12, 2003 Report Share Posted October 12, 2003 But in the meantime.. if storms are what there is.. they're okay here. and more importantly - you're okay here. *hugs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarkPainInside Posted October 18, 2003 Author Report Share Posted October 18, 2003 Thanx all! it is nice 2 kno i can be myself for once and not hide it yet still feel accepted... i have severe depression. writing helps me cope, and not throw it all away. thanx again! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted October 18, 2003 Report Share Posted October 18, 2003 do not throw it all away. do not throw yourself away. it's okay here. you're okay, here. just be. *hugs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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