Dros

Verse 1 Through the trails of darkness No light to guide your way No emotion taking you over No sign of clear day (4 measure break) Verse 2 Time slowly passes by Your world suddenly stands still Mirages of your life leave you blind Of your own will (4 measure break into chorus) Chorus I'm sorry, So sorry I painted this world for you I'm sorry, Just so sorry I left it, black and blue Some voices are just left unheard This is all I have so far... Any suggestions?

OOC: Awesome stuff Gyrfalcon! It was alotta-fun. Thank you!

Affair

Lust

Oh man! After reading this, I'm steadily reminded of my first etch-a-sketch. Oh the memories! I especially love the lines I giggle.. Love the work! Keep posting!

detonate

I'll comment myself.. Here it is : LALALALALALALALALA bOrEd

Once upon a time I could hear your voice But that was long ago Once upon a time I could feel your touch But I soon let you go Once upon a time I could see your soul But now it's just too cold Once upon a time I could taste your sweet lips But the taste has run dry Once upon a time I could run to you But now why should I try Once upon a time You said you loved me But I guess that was a lie

Authority

Rebirth

Burn

Zoom

Compromise

Bootylicious *sorry guys... i had too *

I have fallen asunder the non existent reality of turbulant love compromised by receding infatuation... To seek the escape from the spectrum of grey that has entombed my fore most desire of this very life force.... I've become trapped... Buried under the lost childhood of forgotten dreams which have taken me captive of my own regrets leaving nothing but sleepless nights and thoughtless emotion as of the sweet death that resides in the rose petal's Red last to receive the reassurance of the heart's companionship... Lost and Forsaken, the withered betrayal of a misunderstood love whose only redemption has eclipsed the abstracted lust of an etched mortality to once again Fall asunder... The non existent Reality.....

I really enjoy this poem Regel, the imagery is awesome. And as Wyvern said, changing "groans" into groaned should help a bit. But other than that, great piece!

Nurture

Cycle

Transmission

SURFING!!!!!

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Glad to help!

cosmic

MiP (men in plaid)

Hmm... The last concert I went to was put on by a local band here in Ferndale, Washington. They're pretty nifty n' all. Very Very Very energetic and outspoken. It was fun. They play alternative/funk music. Yay for funk