Dragolin

I particularly like this poem, it just struck me .. KABOEM

makes me want to be you for a sec

oh, this is one damn good piece Parm, thx for linking me ;-) here the rhyme really adds up to the value of the poem, I read it a bit as a story, with a loud narrator adressing the croud he heats up when your story needs it to and calms down when a serious part needs saying. I really enjoyed reading it, for the poem drags you on and on I like how you put a serious matter in a jolly poem, you can read it both ways, but the message is always there This might actually be my favourite line of all "And be rejected without shame" Are you famous yet

Hail to Parm ;-) I'm just a new member, please do not judge me by my first post, I actually joined to see how Arwen's sig looked in a forum I've written some (just a few) poetry in my own language (dutch) but never in english anyway, you'll be seeing some of my posts from time to time, I hope not to irritate again

don't get me wrong, I very much enjoyed this poem! it's just my personal opinion that poems without rhyme, if written good, can be stronger ...

btw: great sig

well when I read it, I recognise you and your words, the poem reminds me of you as a person, so I think it's "really you" not typical you, but really you! lolz

I think this is really your strongest poem, it spoke to me (even though I'm tired atm) yep, a cheers from me :wizzie:

it seems you write a lot of sad poems, maybe your way of coping with your emotions and it can feel good to get it out of your system, I know write me a jolly poem, it could be nice too, no?

*waves at Annael* wow lots of am ppl here, never would have imagined, haha, I like the poet in all of us!

hi! you showed me this in mirc, I already told you then, but I'll say it again: good poem, I like it caus it's simple and direct and it's really you *hug* and you see black, caus you can't see anything at all, the absence of colours will result in black (it's the same as with your computer screen :woot: )

I started reading this post as another poem, not sure if it was intended that way ... but I liked what I was reading, until you stopped using "mommy" as first word anyway, if it is a poem, then you started off really good, seriously, I started reading it like wauw, it sounded really good and fluently, but then you started the part with the 'cup' and personally it killed my enthousiasm ... oh well don't mind me of course

hi guys, nice poem, though personally I think you could write a lot better & touching poems if you dropped the rhyme, it's a habit some ppl tend to hold on to, but the best poems are written without it anyway don't mind me of course