The Poets Dream

[Psimon]

Here's one I wrote for the wedding of the twin brother of my best man... whew! Anyway... the marriage lasted a year! I was so sad

(hopefully my poem had nothing to do with it!)

 

The Poet's Dream

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Awake, I see the ocean

vast and powerful in actions

and words echo on it's shores

Beauty in it's life and motions.

 

Asleep, I see the rose

budding in the wilderness hazy

throwing off the rocks and stones

that make this world so crazy.

 

Enriched with time, it grows

as I see you both together

reveals the ocean and the rose

that is your love forever.

 

 

May your love for each other know no bounds

May it set the world on fire and the stars dim beside it

May angels and heroes weep at the beauty there

May you live forever within it.

 

 

 

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Sorry for the sudden flood people... I've not contributed for so long, I felt I'd better get off my - dare I say it? - *sexy* butt and post something. (no nasty comments from the gallery on the sexy butt comment pls LMAO )

 

Anyway... Peace. Out.

[Alaeha]

Great poem... I've never written a poem about someone else's love... Well, not one where that someone else's love was returned. Interesting use of partial rhymes, too. Good form and good poem.

 

But we don't have a peanut gallery here... Nope! But I'll make you a deal: I won't comment on your sexy butt if you don't comment about how mine is entirely too intelligent. (I'm often called a smart... umm... I don't use such language) Fair enough?

[Peredhil]

avoids the whole butt thing as his target is far too large and inviting.

I'd hate to end up the butt of the joke.

 

Anyway, I think the first two stanzas contrast nicely, and set up for the unifying third verse, which in turn leads well into the well-wishing of the fourth.

 

Good stuff, maynert.