Vlad Posted March 2, 2003 Report Share Posted March 2, 2003 i am alone the day is long and tedious i stay away from others who wish to do me harm i am cold. the air is thin and crisp. i hudle in a corner, searching for life. I am a person. the life I never had looms, I reach to grab it's feet- just as it slinks away. I am myself! You cannot be like me, I'm proud to be an individual. Staying away from your psuedo-existance. ------- I don't really like how the last stanza turned out. All comments are apreciated. (Yes, the punctuation and capitalization are intentional.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tamaranis Posted March 2, 2003 Report Share Posted March 2, 2003 I can't comment on actual structure or such, because I just can't... Nice poem though. I think I know how you feel... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaneus Posted March 2, 2003 Report Share Posted March 2, 2003 Yeah, I'm with Tamaranis on this one, I can never think of editting ideas but I can say one thing... Great job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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