Deadly Nightshade Posted February 9, 2003 Report Share Posted February 9, 2003 Your blood is sweet as it runs down my throat like wine I hold you close for now you are mine I drop your body to the ground with a pound from that moment forth there is not a sound Your life means nothing but your blood is sweet and I thank you for the life giving treat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyril Darkcloud Posted February 12, 2003 Report Share Posted February 12, 2003 (edited) Thirsts are many and varied things, things that set a life to seeking what is needed, what is wanted, what is lacking. Many be the thirsts of life. Few the lives of lucky strength that satisfy the urge of thirst. Many, many more the lives that in their thirsting fall to the slaking of another’s urge. Much intensity spoken in a few words. The rhythmic movement of the piece and the use of rhyme are skillfully handled -- it flows quickly and smoothly without losing its force. Nicely done. I’m looking forward to reading more of your stuff. Good luck with your application! Edited February 12, 2003 by Cyril Darkcloud Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rune Posted February 21, 2003 Report Share Posted February 21, 2003 Short and sweet. I like it alot. Good luck on your app! oh wait, im slow responding, Congrats on your app! ^__^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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