madhatter Posted November 20, 2005 Report Share Posted November 20, 2005 my haiku for you is special in many ways i heart you long time OOC: I wrote this a couple of days ago for a friend. It's a little silly, and I came up with it spontaneously. But if I were to look back on it now, this is how I would analyze it. The syllables are correct. The grammar is lacking, but if anything it might put more of an emphasis on an unconventional poem. The heart you long time, is a sortof reference/allusion to Full Metal Jacket where the ahem... prostitute says to one of the American soldiers "I love you long time, or something of the sort." Wow, it actually took me longer to analyze it then to write it. But thanks for your time, I just thought it has been too long since I last posted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted November 20, 2005 Report Share Posted November 20, 2005 I love non-sensical, and this one was great in many ways. Personally I could've done without the analyses until after it had been up for a few days, but thanks for posting Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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