The Five Minute Poem

[madhatter]

The old typewriter keys clang

Ruffled paper shifted through

Let alone ending with a bang

Poet must finish before date due

 

Mistakes of grammar and spelling

were spaced and commonplace

Reminiscent of coarse yelling

The words were rude and crude

 

The paper was done

The poet had won

But at what cost

His skill was lost

 

OOC: My first poem written in a long while. Since my last contribution to The Pen in fact. Er, it's a little rusty, so I'm very open to criticisms. In reality, the poem really did only take me 5 minutes, and the premise of the poem was based on the time it took me. Thanks in advance.

[Tanuchan]

I like the poem, specially the first stanza. It made me remember the days when the typewriter was the only way to type my school papers (yeah, it tells my age, I know ). The sounds are all there - metallic and loud. Nicely summarized in a few lines.

 

The last stanza broke the flow at first, but as I read and re-read, it started to blend in the general feeling again. It makes me think of a final glance at that paper from the typewriter, and frustrated poet muttering to himself.

 

A nice work, madhatter. I hope we can read more of your poems .

 

*hugs*

 

~Tanny

[madhatter]

Hehe thank you Tanny for the war welcome and the encouragment. Yes, for the final stanza I was hoping to create a feeling of that frustrated and depleted poet. I'm glad it came out.