Mira Posted December 13, 2004 Report Share Posted December 13, 2004 I've found myself trying to describe places in my poems of late, both real or imaginary, and I've been wondering if this style of writing is effective and if my descriptions are poignant enough to get my point across. Any feedback on this issue would be greatly appreciated. The tired tan paint lies flat on the walls, Never trying to be more than it is. Ten-thousand sickening feet of it, Dragging on forever. There are doors, Placed seemingly at random, From which people come and go. They are only specters though, Traveling down this endless corridor. And I sit on this sole wooden bench forever. Unable to go; not wanting to stay Pencil held to blank pad of paper. Unable to write what I want to say. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Salinye Posted December 13, 2004 Report Share Posted December 13, 2004 Mira, I thought the "feeling" of this place was painted very vividly. To me it seemed to be a boring drab place. Perhaps a school corridor or some sort of old building. A older large stale building. Maybe a place where people might have to sit and wait for endless hours to talk to someone or another that they were supposed to see over an hour ago. That's the feeling it left me with, anyway. :0) ~Salinye Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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