Zariah Posted April 6, 2004 Report Share Posted April 6, 2004 Seize me if you can, As I leave behind heavy dust. On my route in life’s voyage, I use motivation as the thrust. You have got to be earnest; I want real love or none at all. I'm overcoming life’s convictions, And need not again to fall. If you give me decent rationale, Why of you I shouldn’t fret. I'll consider letting you inside, Deeming you as no threat. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted April 8, 2004 Report Share Posted April 8, 2004 (edited) This struck me as sweet. Especially how you wrapped it up with your last sentence Deeming you as no threat Very sweet and almost tender ending there I have to admit though, that at first it seemed a very forced form and word-choice to me. But after reading it again and again for some days I think it works afterall in the end. Maybe because of the determination of the narrator and the strength that almost turns into a force when you consider ..overcomming life's convictions A piece not to be read lightly, well done Edited April 8, 2004 by Appy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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