Tanuchan Posted February 13, 2004 Report Share Posted February 13, 2004 Walls You touch something deep inside me where there's a heart hidden behind walls. Tall, thick walls darkened by years marked by wars tried by many broken by some. Yet still strong and zealous to keep safe that which is easily hurt. Broken, rebuilt, to be broken again and rebuilt stronger yet, the walls protect but also close defend but also choke cover and stifle the life in me. Yet the heart still senses and behind walls wishes silently crying yearning for a touch for words of care for words of love. Your voice echoes rebounds on walls comes so near and yet is kept far by walls that refuse to crumble and let go the memories of wars past of many wounds taken and the pain of a broken heart. Yet the heart still cares and from behind walls reaches to answer the need of a similar heart To try and break past other walls to soothe and heal another's wounds to lend its beating to another's dreams. And in reaching there's the hope that the walls will be weakened and in dust they finally crumble healing at last two darkened hearts and a crying will be heard soft but sweet of welcome release of hearts finally whole. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yuki Kokoro Posted February 13, 2004 Report Share Posted February 13, 2004 Your voice echoes rebounds on walls comes so near and yet is kept far I liked this image of a maze of walls so that the voice reaches the center, but the person cannot. Also, the broken lines and rhythm of this piece helps show how set and rigid the speaker is, adding to the concept of withdrawal and walls. Nice poem overall and it's good to see you applying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tanuchan Posted February 13, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2004 Thank you Yuki I'm kind of nervous about applying... never really got over my shyness in showing what I write But people here are great Thanks again! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted February 15, 2004 Report Share Posted February 15, 2004 Tanuchan restlessly paces back and forth between corners in the Recruiter's Office, nervously toying with a pen in her left hand as she ponders where the Elder of Initiates could be. Turning towards Yuki Kokoro and anxiously brushing a hand through her hair, the eager applicant stands in silence for a moment before hesitantly muttering: "Are you sure the Elder of Initiates is always late, Yuki?" Yuki Kokoro nods reassuringly from her office seat, and warmly answers: "Yes, I don't think you should have anything to worry about Tanuchan. Usually, the reptilian Elder takes at least a few days to overcome all of the..." At that moment, Wyvern frantically races into the office as fast as his scaly legs can carry him, dodging several bricks, mortar fragments, and full wall segments being tossed at him by angered construction workers hot on his trail. Quickly slamming the office door behind him and praying that the disgruntled customers don't break out any heavy equipment in their chase, the overgrown lizard tosses off a construction helmet uselessly hanging from his horns and collapses into his desk chair. "... obstacles in his path." finishes Yuki in a slightly irritated manner, silently wishing that the construction workers outside of the office door wouldn't scream the phrase "Son of a Forklift!" so loudly. Wyvern proceeds to shift through several papers on his overflowing desktop, and takes a five minute breather before lifting Tanuchan's application from the top of the pile and reading it over in a thorough manner. After finishing with the poem, the greedy lizard flashes the eager applicant a grin full of razor sharp teeth and hisses: "A very nice application poem, Tanuchan... I would offer you the same Almost Dragonic Brand wall building products I gave to those "Almost Satisfied Costumers" outdoors (AlmostSatisifiedisaTrademarkofAlmostDragonic), but I see that you're looking to deconstruct walls rather than build them. Then again, the casual customer has labeled my building products "95% certain to collapse into heaps of rubble," so perhaps you would be interested...?" Tanuchan frowns and silently shakes her head. "Ah well." sighs Wyvern while stamping Tanuchan's application ACCEPTED. "I would also offer you something along the lines of 'heart', but that's one of the few terms that's rather foreign to my industry." Tanuchan happily takes her ACCEPTED application, and is about to exit the office when she suddenly notices a large construction worker crane looming towards the office window. Noticing that Wyvern is unaware of the approaching vehicle, the applicant's eyes widen and she silently points towards in it's direction... ;-) OOC: A good poem and an ACCEPTED application, Tanuchan. Welcome to the Mighty Pen! I look forward to reading more of your writing, and hope to see you active in community projects as well. Once again, welcome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeanTheAdequate Posted February 15, 2004 Report Share Posted February 15, 2004 YAY! Tanuchan made it. *SOB* I'm so proud and happy... And the poem. W-O-W!!! Just take down the walls, must remember that! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tanuchan Posted February 15, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 15, 2004 Tanny holds the Accepted application againt herself, eyes brimming with tears. *hugs tightly both Yuki and Dean* Thank you. Thank you so much!! I will try my best here, to help and to build. Not walls, but friendship and love. Dean, thank you really for your support and for having brought me to the Pen. *hugs Dean again* Er... Elder Wyvern, sorry for interrupting your... ahm... contemplation... but shouldn't you do something about that... crane coming at us? Her eyes go from the window to the Elder and back again to the window, unsure of whether leaving or trying to drag the people out... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Degenero Angelus Posted February 15, 2004 Report Share Posted February 15, 2004 Congratultion on being accepted, it's a wonderful place, the Pen is. And since it seems you're quite the poet, I'm glad to have you around. Always nice to see more good poets around here. *Deg hugs Tanuchan* Again, congratulation. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tanuchan Posted February 15, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 15, 2004 *Tanny hugs Deg back* Thank you so much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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