Appy Posted January 28, 2004 Report Share Posted January 28, 2004 ~ Came into being while pondering over a picture in my mind ~ Swirling; swirling round and round Never or ever touching ground Bundling; bundling found still bound Always; forever increased amount Dwindling; dwindling on all sound Ever and never standing ground Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jonathan_wolfe Posted January 29, 2004 Report Share Posted January 29, 2004 What I like about this is that I've never seen this kind of structure in a poem before, I love the semicoloned first lines in each stanza. I wonder if the word choices upsets the rhythm of the reading of it halfway through, I had to go back and reread it before I got it right Nah, it's good, short and sweet and good for the mind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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