Vlad Posted November 23, 2003 Report Share Posted November 23, 2003 What is the fuel that lights the soul each day? What would happen if it ever should run out? To cease to live, our flame extinguished- To live to cease, bringing your own despair. Sorrow follows those who seek it, Look up and tell life what it is missing. Exist in harmony with nature's green Stoic state simply stays sublime The air we breathe lights up your day Sun's rays whizzing by so fast Man makes fire to stay warm Fire to survive, burn the candlewax Our souls acting as wicks When it runs out, so do we. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HopperWolf Posted November 25, 2003 Report Share Posted November 25, 2003 A nice sentement with vivid, primative imagery (getting back to basics lending a good overtone). the conversational metre is good also. Adds personality. As if a personal message to the reader. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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