Merelas Posted November 13, 2003 Report Share Posted November 13, 2003 Your hatred stings my soul… your scorn burns me as a flame. And what sin have I committed against you? What wrong have I done you? I see it now… I have not done you wrong, but myself. Forgive me for ever believing you could change. Forgive me for ever hoping to be the one to help you do so. Forgive me for placing myself on the line… Forgive me for loving you. How could I be so blind? How could my love have been so true, And been so wholly and utterly rejected? How could I have loved you? Why have I done this to myself? Why have I handed you my heart? Why have I allowed you to cut it up into pieces before my eyes? But more importantly… why do I still love you? I just wrote this in about 7 seconds, lol... comments are welcomed and encouraged. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted November 13, 2003 Report Share Posted November 13, 2003 mmm *nod* i've heard this, from across gender lines and across age boundaries. i've even said and felt some of it at various times. disillusionment is bitter indeed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alaeha Posted November 13, 2003 Report Share Posted November 13, 2003 I like it... there's a lot of emotion to it... and I know how it feels. *Hugs* Giving up hope is never fun... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Illianna Wolfsong Posted November 14, 2003 Report Share Posted November 14, 2003 (edited) Wow! Powerful. This is painful to read as the speaker or as the intended audience. My comments are understated at best because of the sheer force of your words and the message they paint. Either this is fresh pain for you, pain you have known well, or you have an amazing ability to make abstract real. I've read it a few times now... I think I'll stop reading it. It hurts to read. LOL Now THAT says something about the power of these words. Again... my main thought... Wow! -Illi Edited November 14, 2003 by Illianna Wolfsong Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Regel Posted November 14, 2003 Report Share Posted November 14, 2003 You were drugged!! I firmly believe that the human body releases drugs that make you blind and stupid towards the object of your affection. It is easy for any one who has gone through this to see that after the drug loses it's effect (love) that eyesight and sensibilities return. You see things as they are and not how we wanted them to be. Very nice piece of writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kalypso Posted November 14, 2003 Report Share Posted November 14, 2003 Poems that express raw emotion are amongst the best. You really did an outstanding job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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