Appy Posted September 16, 2003 Report Share Posted September 16, 2003 ~ I liked the "You are Incomplete" too much to get rid of it, and the "You are Boring" needed to close it (it's about writer's block afterall, as reverie pointed out here ) So tadaa, new stanza forced it's way in ~ The world is White It looks at me and says: "You are Empty" and I agree I've always despised White.. The world is Darkness It looks at me and says: "You are Nothing" and I agree I've always feared Darkness.. The world is Twilit It looks at me and says: "You are Incomplete" and I agree I've always shunned The Grey.. The world is a Mirror It looks at me and says: "You are Boring" and I agree I've never liked Me.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayshela Posted September 16, 2003 Report Share Posted September 16, 2003 VERY good. i think you're right, the extra stanza was needed to complete it. i liked each previous version, but i *love* this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rhapsody Posted September 20, 2003 Report Share Posted September 20, 2003 Wow, its really depressing, but I absolutely love the structure. Very original and brief, but effective. So what DO you like? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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