I guess I should finally pipe up and thank everyone for their comments.
If I could get someone to pick apart these poems analytically, it would be vastly appreciated... I get the feeling I have no idea what the hell I'm thowing onto the paper... I'm going to start calling it "Stream of Consciousness" poetry...
This is your Brain on Jonathan.
There is definitely a -lot- more to come, I'm far from finished yet.
Where is the sky...
feel like flight,
flying?
the wrong way... can't reach it
spinning... I see her..
can't reach...
Why won't she see me?
sideways, all is changed.
somehow I'll make it down
I've found her,
she's mine...
I cry...
I cry...
It's all gone.
It's all back...
Changed.
The windows, blinded
cars goes by, whistle-whoosh of the wet road
no sky, no blue blue sky
gray... murky blue,
wet...
inside, warm.. too warm..
turn the heat down
lighting yellow,
still alone.
dry, swallow...
rain
Close my eyes
World before me
People laughing, sky is blue.
Close my eyes
I'm in another world
sky is blue, the grass is green
I never want to leave
my mind...
again.
grass too green
sky too blue
towers so white
pearly white
is this real? can it be made?
where am i...
fly!
awake.
Jonathan strides into the room, his beige and burnt sienna robes flowing about his feet as he arrives in the new Pen keep
"I am that is."
He coughs and clears his throat
"I am that is, who I am...
What?"
With that, he strides back out.
Jonathan Wolfe
Group: Page
Title: Dreaming Real
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